All Comments on 'Kelly's Quest Ch. 04: Final'

An incest tag would not be amiss. Have you been bitten by a fire ant? If one had bitten her pussy, she would not react well to her sister masturbating her.

Well written, as usual, but on the whole I found the entire story uncomfortable to read.

Tech, I usually do not criticize other writers. Writing is hard enough without my narrow-minded pedantry.

But since these "Kelly's Quest" stories are old, I presume from your early years as a beginning writer. This is certainly not your best work.

It lacks the biting humor and emotional depth of your more recent creations.

My suggestion would be, if the inspiration strikes, for you to pull these stories and rewrite them from a more experienced and mature POV.

The characters need more development to be considered believable and well-rounded if flawed people.

If this is not "the best" than is is so close that it doesn't matter.Thank you Tech,for a tremendous read.

I think it's a good story but this idea that someone is controling you isn't my thing. Someone that would be there for you if anything wrong happens is showing a cute accomplicity in the next adventures.