All Comments on 'Kid Sister'

Everything was amazing. However, Tiffany was overkill. The scene between Felicity and Ben was superb. Sometimes, less is better.

Thanks for the feedback. I added the second girl because I wanted the character to have a three way like his fiancée had. I can see the point you make though.

You need to find a way for Melissa, Felicity and their mom to have a three on one orgy with Ben.

This was so well written! Just enough back story and the pacing was amazing. Loved it!

Could use more from these characters

Very Erotic writing, but watch the details in your next story. There was semen on his cock, as some of it had run down it and out of the rubber. So, he could have gotten either or both of the high school girls pregnant.

Thanks for all of your feedback. I really hope that people continue to read it and give it a score (preferably a good one). I am working on another story with these characters. I don't know if it will be as well received as this one has been but I'm hopeful.

I really enjoyed the story, but the ending was a bit too much like a porno flick. Call me crazy, but I hate pornos that end with some guy jacking off on a girl or girls face(s) because it doesn't really happen except in the flicks. Old VHS porno rarely ended like that because it is just silly.

After reading all three stories in the series (and they are all good), this one is still my favorite. You do an excellent job providing exposition. I could feel the tension gradually building between Ben and Felicity. And the party at Tiffany's was hot!

Hope the next chapter is as good