All Comments on 'Kidnapped Kristin Ch. 03'

by sarpedom

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago

This is something of an okay story - but there is ZERO reason you should have published this as a chapter. It's entirely incomplete and advances nothing. Do yourself and everyone else a favor and WRITE SOMETHING - a completed chapter or completed piece, with a start, middle, and end before you post. Too many people here get so worked up and needy to have done something that they just post post post post too fast, too much garbage, without a story being there. Have some patience because this has potential, but you are getting in your own way by not going somewhere with it before putting it out there.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
Very Insightful . . .

& constructive comment & one I sincerely hope you'll embrace in your writing. I eagerly opened this chapter as I was intrigued by your initial chapter, yet disappointed by the next two since nothing really happens to move the story forward or develop the characters. Give us a reason to want to keep coming back, please. Ok? & Thank you for your story. We await your next submission with great anticipation. Keep writing.

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