All Comments on 'Kimono'

I thought that was exquisite! Oh…still processing it, but don't want to go that route; just want to keep feeling the words caressing at my emotions…Beautifully written and perfectly handled. Ohhhhhh yes! It's simply perfect! (I knew as soon as I saw that you were using embedded dialogue that it was going to be good. Got myself a cup of tea and settled in for a delicious read. And I was right. It is <i>perfectly</i> delicious)

There is a reason for punctuation but hey who am I to complain about your style but why spoil your style with question marks commas and other fripperies they are only there to make a sense of your words andspacesareprobablytoomuchforsomeonewithyouramountofstyletoo.

Tight and controlled, the dialogue and narrative rolled together as they do in real life to heighten the immediacy of a moving and well-told tale.

You'll get used to the ignorant complainers about the use of embedded dialogue. Ignore them. Your writing is YOURS. Don't compromise, good writers don't.

Most of my stories use embedded dialogue, I learned to write like this years ago. When I compromised on Lit and used 'quotes' for a couple of stories, my scores fell noticeably.

Looking forward to reading more from you.

all at once. This is a beautiful cameo - dreamy yet urgent, sensuous and sensitive. Fortunately the minority of those representing Scotland are as ignorant as Anonymous in Scotland. The rest of us are intelligent, well-read, erudite, <i>and</i> literate…So please don't allow the minority voice to influence your decision to post another story. Thank you!

No quotations. No read. It's laziness on your part. Nothing more.

Itriedtoreadyourstorywithoutthepunctuationyou'veomittedandIguessIonlyhadtroubleinafewplaceswheretherewereactualquotesthatshouldhavehadsomepunctuation. Iamagreatfanofpunctuation;Ithinkitmakesstoriessomuchmorereadable. TheonlyworsethingIcouldthinkofwouldbeleavingoutthespacesbetweenwords.

Oh my, what a beautifully written, well constructed story. I love your writing style...very unique and emotional. Thank you for writing such a delicately lovely story. And PLEASE! ignore those incredibly erudite individuals who can't understand embedded dialogue, and who simply can't comprehend the notion that dialogue and action are not separate in real life (only in cartoons and in stylized forms of literature).

<p>Your character development was awesome. This touched my heart in more ways than one - true romance at it's best. Keep up the good work and we want MORE. I never expected to come across anything like this.</p><p>Oh, and to those twits who made the comments about lack of punctuation: Listen up, dweebs! The author told you at the very beginning of the story that he was using a particular style of writing. It's called "Embedded Dialogue". It's a well-established style of writing, but obviously far too sophisticated for the likes of SOME poor ill-educated readers on this site.</p>

What a treasure! What pure delight to have found such a gem on this site! This is a very sensuous and deeply emotional story as well as being incredibly sexy. Beautifully written too. (And the punctuation is <i>divine</i>).

an amazing amount packed into a short space. The ending was perfect, the I know why I should not but I am going to anyway moment was beautifull and painfull at the same time. A brave name you have chosen but on this evidence its justified. Cheers. -- UK CYNIC

****Some short stories are like fleeting dreams beautiful for the moment. Thanks for the read very entertaining story.