by JodiHutchins
just gotta give props to "aroma of a thesaurus". It was anonymous or I would provide attribution after I steal it. Solid turn of phrase.
Love the story. PLEASE PLEASE keep writing. The imperfections make your work better. Keeo rocking
some weirdly over written sentences and the aroma of a thesaurus at times but it's a delightfully evocative narrative
A brilliant story, cleverly crafted and well thought out. The pace is superb and the characters well developed.
Robertodavo aka Robert Davidson.
I love your writing and this story is just another of your brilliant creations.
Very good read and a cliffhanger to polish it off! And you as an author are as promising as the story is.
Thank you for sharing with us. Wonderfully done.
I really like where this is going so far. Blowing up casserole dishes, sensing other's thoughts. Oh yeah, and there's a blossoming romance, and it's well written too. You've got me hooked, and I can't wait to read part 2.
got to admit, I a liking this so far, great plot hook, cant wait to read the next chapter.
and I do like Roland sounds like my kind of girl ;)
Very good 1st submission. Would also love more Roland involvement and read about her "business meetings".
Great story. I absolutely love it. Characters are wonderful, the plot is intriguing. Started part 2 but am rereading this again to refresh my memory. I'm hope part 2 is as good as part 1. This you.
I really enjoyed reading this first chapter of your story. I like the way the characters were fleshed out, and I'm very much looking forward to the next chapter! Thank you for sharing this with us!
I appreciate the praise. I’m hoping to add chapter 2 as promptly as I can.
What will happen when you get experience? Oh My God. One word, Fantastic. There are more, many more, that one should do. Miranda, I fear will not see Natalie coming. Too bad for her.
An absolutely riveting first chapter. I can’t believe this is your first story! I can’t wait for the next instalment. Please don’t make us wait too long. Much love and many thanks.