All Comments on 'Kissing Cousin'

This has the makings of a good story, but please get a proof reader to help with grammar. Poor grammar takes a lot from the story...Thanks

Tom

Good mark for good intentions and no anal or oversized equipment.

But the grammar needs work

Did you go to grade school? Succors??

was a good one in the making, but like the others, I have to agree that the grammar, as well as mixing what 2 people are saying in the one sentence, does make it harder to follow. I'm sure you will be better with the next chapter (if there is one) in this story. I make many errors in my stories, and none of us are perfect.

I'm sorry I just could not read this the grammar was atrocious. Suggest you get someone to edit in the future

Far too many words are misspelled! You are in dire need of a proof reader.

Started off quite well, then became sloppy and primitive. Also, the writer needs to learn proper English.