All Comments on 'Kissing Cousins Ch. 06'

First I was worried that the nineteenth century style and mannerisms would make for an impenetrable story, but this was surprisingly readable. Clean style too. Flowery terms, but you warned us, so fair enough.

As for the subject matter, I like the idea of kissing cousins more than I care to admit. I'm just not sure about all the other kinks. Humiliation, control to the point of slavery - not exactly my cup of tea. I wouldn't mind if I enjoyed the plot and characters, but from what I've seen in this chapter, the prevailing emotions seem to be a mixture of hate and disdain. I like conflict and drama, if it's balanced with positives. This just feels too grim. Also it's hard to identify with the main character if this is what she wants.

A random observation - the staff is described as being amused at her state. I'd expect them being confused, offended, even worried. Some nervous laughter maybe, but it's hard to imagine anything that'd have made them so callous as to act the way they did. If that was just an unreliable narrator, I haven't seen any other sign of that.

This comment turned out more negative than I intended - I'm not saying the story is bad, it's really well written and interesting. It deserves more love, just like the characters in it.

Jessica,

I know this particular chapter seems grim and hard to identify with. As far as the humiliation and disdain, this is a multi chapter novelette, and there will be ups and downs. Just as the second chapter seemed too much to bear, this one seems to throw Elizabeth back into the clutches of her evil cousin. All I can say is, be patient. As in any novel, there are some chapters which will annoy and others that will please. I've never been one to write in an overly optimistic tone, but try and balance the good with the evil. I thought of publishing this as a whole rather than in pieces, and in hindsight perhaps it would have been more well received. But, I normally do not write to please, so although I appreciate the ratings and comments I receive, I would write in any event, because I have to. The behavior of the staff, be patient. Diana's apparent deceit, there is a reason. All will be revealed, in time. Thanks again for your well thought out comment, and I hope you will continue to read.

Sincerely,

Saphhia

I read through chapters 1-5. I see the context now and appreciate the twists and turns, the conflict/drama you've constructed. This isn't a typical stroke story. We need more erotica on this level.

Sadly, I didn't warm up to any of the main characters. Sarah is petty and selfish, which hurts twice as much as she's family and should be especially protective and caring. Surprisingly, Diana isn't much better - she was sweet when she had to be, but given power, she turned it against Elizabeth. Not just the latest betrayal, the hair scene and the subsequent escalation were just wrong. Both relationships seem unhealthy. And Elizabeth is so self-destructive, it's bordering on mental illness. Arousal isn't enough to justify .. any of that. I did enjoy that good-natured shopkeeper though.

So at this point, I see the genre of this as an erotic tragedy. Which has its place I guess, I just struggle to enjoy suffering.

I am however intrigued. I can see change in Elizabeth as she grows older, so maybe it will turn around. It's not over until it's over. A warning - if you go for a downer ending, people will be pissed.