All Comments on 'Kitten Fantasy'

I enjoyed that story

Very nice work!

I call my sister 'kitty'. I'm ashamed

Sooooo hot!! Keep writing!!

Okay. Here's some minor critics. You switched from talking about your boyfriend to talking about the reader. Now as I would love it to be talking to me, I would hope your next story says "you" all the time and never the word he. You should write something like this again, which was obviously passion filled and pouring out your mind, but maybe go back and incorporate your quotes slightly better. They seemed very oddly worded. It seemed like a script, and im sure you talk like that on occasion as do i, but during sex, you tend to be slightly more fluid with phrasing. You can explained things very well and I very much enjoyed the story. I would like to hear more about your masters torturing/owning you. Thank you for a good read.