by Mars_Inamorata
This is sooooooo sweet so innocent so cute so lovely ....... My goodness all this clumsiness all this selfless being , this story is so extraordinary marvelous ....... Ten stars are not enough
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Every time I've read this story (which is loads) I laugh until i have tears in my eyes and always finish reading with the biggest smile. Short, funny as hell and romantic. What more is needed for a good story?
I enjoyed the setting, the outfit descriptions and the endearing personalities of the characters. I found it more entertaining than erotic but a good read nonetheless.
Being a bit of a klutz myself i could relate to this sweet tale
Please write more
I ain't gonna lie I came here to have a quick sexual fantasy to jack off but reading this story was a pleasant surprise. A beautiful love story between two girls that conveyed that awkward friendly tension to this romance. Came for the sex stories stayed for the story
A really lovely story, great build up and ending. Perhaps too many "smirks" etc. Have a look at the use of English to improve. (I gave it 4stars)
Nice read, actually enjoyed it and will look out for a follow-up. Cute I would say. The characters will grow and develop as will the author. Thank you for your time in writing this.
I thought you captured the early moments of attraction and love very well. I enjoyed this piece very much. It reminded me of that crazy jumble of feelings I had when I first started falling for my best friend. Thank you very much for sharing your stories.
I loved the story by the way. Sorry, forgot to mention that. :)
Be quiet. I understand criticism, but you are being an asshole. All you had to say was you didn't like it the author's style of writing. You took it way too far for no reason.
...but the "writing" makes it very nearly unreadable!
Incredibly over-written at the start, appalling dialogue, spelling and grammatical errors galore... etc.
PLEASE, get some help with your writing before you submit again.
I've realized this was a very straightforward story with little knowledge about the characters. I plan on developing them some more as I go into another chapter, though. Please look forward to it.
I'll see to that sequal then given the large amount of requests. Thanks for the comment!
hi i loved the story and would definitely want to hear more about them together :) hopefully you not go off kilter and make them party girls or something .. i like the love between them it irritates me when writers suddenly change the style of the story ..
It works as a one-shot as is, but I'd love a sequel, prequel, whatever... I mention prequel just because I think hearing more about Tat's previous misadventures and just in general more background on the characters would be nice. In other words, i like the novelette best, but enjoy the short story.
please write another ch to this, I though this was very good story, but not sure anyone can be that much of a klutz, but it was a good twist to the story anyway
This was written as a one shot type of story, but if I get more requests to write a sequal, I definitely will!
Thanks for the support! Please look forward to more from me!
Thanks for the comment!! I plan on writing more on here, don't worry. I haven't thought about a sequal for this one, however, but there's definitely more I can develop with this story.
Agreed please write more! You have a great talent for writing! Thank you for sharing it!
Please write more, whether it's a sequel to this story or a new one. I enjoyed reading your stories a lot, thanks for writing.