by addieQ
Excellent story. Very nice build of sexual tension. Definitely one of my favorites
There is nothing like sisterly love and especially the very first time.
This was hugely intense. You made me experience these characters' enraptured, uncontained need for sexual gratification.
The only thing that only sort of distracted my mind was how the heck did they get from the bedroom in a house to a tent?The rest of it was outstanding.
I corrected a few typos in the text (the tent reference below is now fixed) Thanks to the readers who caught my mistakes.
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I love your emphasis on the sisters' love for each other and the beauty they see in each other, and how they help each other overcome their insecurities. Oh, and the sex was really hot, too. Well done!
My wife got soaking wet reading this and came hard as I fingered her. Fantastic work!
A lot of spelling and grammar errors, and the story got shockingly repetitive in the first part. The middle of the story was strong ignoring the conventions, with a pretty good conclusion. A work in progress, but I wish you luck in continuing your writing.
The story is very similar, and some of the wording is almost identical in spots.
http://nifty.org/nifty/lesbian/highschool/friend-in-need
About the Plagiarism comment above. Yep, it's true, I used the story "friend in need" from Kala Hill as a sort of templet when I created this story.
I really LOVED that story, and I love most of Kala Hill's writings.
But just so you know, I sent a personal message to Kala before I posted this story here, and I sent the author the entire story. She read it, and replied that she thought it was totally okay.
I changed the story dramatically, but (as the commenter noted) there are a few lines that remain - some are word for word.
I use other authors as an inspiration for some of my stories, mostly I like the "tone" they capture, and I feel a dee need to expand I write my own version.
Loved these two sisters sharing such an intense and emotional orgasm. Terrific!
I'm glad I listened to your recommendation, because this story was amazing! I liked the plot to build up to the two sisters acting that out, and you could simply feel the love they shared throughout the whole thing! Kristi needing to get off and using Katherine was a very nice on the erotic side, as well, and I like how Katherine's love simply allowed her to, no questions asked :P.
Something I noticed was that your stories somewhat repeat terminology, but really, who cares I guess? XD, it's not like I haven't been pretty much exclusively reading your stories lately, but such terms like "Bum-hole" that are used exclusively might be changed up a bit sometimes to give it diversity-- not a big deal though! A 5 star story either way, from a 5 star author.
This was the best incest / sister story ever. PLEASE make a 2nd chapter!
Wonderfully HOT story of close-knit *PASSION* between sisters, that surprisingly (and VERY REFRESHINGLY) mentions pubic hair!
(Sick o' this BALD shit...)
I can honestly say that this was the first I ever felt like I was an intruder, a voyeur, to this moment. The emotions between these two girls - between sisters no less - were so realalistic, I could feel it! While I will probably never consider this erotic material, it was nonetheless beautiful and wonderful to read.
I never give perfect scores, but I didn't quite like this as much as other lesbian stories I've read here on Literotica, ergo the A-. It was cute, and sexy all at once....