by seducedHylas
Outstanding story and very well written! What is with all the XXXXXXXX every other paragraph? Very distracting.
I am so glad that are writing again. You, TheTalkMan and Wannabeboytoy are great authors in this category. I hope to see more. Please update ASAP!
So glad to see that you are writing again. I love corruption stories and you write them very well!
I happen to like corruption stories, been a fan for a while, will Haley become Gethsemane's protoge?
thank god your back...you are the best at this genre. Saw you wrote again and devoured the story...as always you didn't disappoint...welcome back
Holy cow, that was great. So glad you decided to write again. Exactly the genre I like the most!
I'm a big fan of your stuff, and this specific genre, and I'm incredibly happy to see you writing again. I agree with the sentiment below; this was a nicely balanced and paced fantasy story, and I can't wait to see what more you have in store!
I enjoyed that though she had powers, she didn't rely on them to actually seduce the husband; just to immobilize him. I'm also intrigued by ideas that you may have set up here... such as the daughters fascination with superheroes, and 'Ane's reveal of them... perhaps her next step is winning over his children from their mother as well? Perhaps she'll grow up to be a supervillain instead of a superhero? Lots of potential for great, character driven, evil stuff!
Great work; hope to see more!
I loved your previous storys and was excited to see there was a new story. You did it again, a great story. Keep it up! I see Pt. 01 in the heading, I can only hope there is more to come.
...and then devoured the other 3 that you have written. I really liked the story and the writing. Thank You!
The story shared a balance of fantasy and reality, yet every man can connect with it. Perhaps broken into 3 parts would have left the reader to yearn for more, perhaps you have a sequel already planned.