by digital_bath
Please don't make the readers wait too long for the next installment. MORE!
I also look forward to additional chapters and additional "smuttiness" sounds appropriate with such a lovely slave. Please post the next scene quickly.
Looking forward to the next installment when you crank the smittiness up to an 11!
I really love this story so far. Very descriptive and very hot. Please post more chapters soon!! I hope he starts to see her as more than just a slave :)
Id love to see where this goes, he is holding back so much not to just shove himself inside her virgin pussy and it makes it so good, i am super turned on and the writing was awesome keep up the good work
Nice start...
(And, by the way, a good job with the paragraphing. It is often underestimated how important this factor is for the readability of an online text.)
For your first submission, it is very well written. I look forward to more!
It's a good story from a writing point of view, there are just a few historical things that get me when I read it, maybe read up a little on roman history if you haven't already done so otherwise, keep it up.
I just wanted to say thanks for all the feedback! I'm reading as much as I can get my hands on about Ancient Rome. I've put in the 3rd chapter yesterday and I started the 4th chapter today. :)
Looking forward to chapter 3. The things that Julian can do Laelia in ancient Rome .... The possibilities are endless .....
Hope this plays out to it's full potential. We will see; so many do not.
This story is abandoned. Disregard my previous comment and do not waste your time on this story or it's author, who could not care less about her readers.