All Comments on 'Lake Powell Ch. 02'

When Amy and Andrew were driving home, they quickly went from discussing a potential divorce to discussing who would provide the snacks for a neighborhood-wide wife swapping club. If it got that silly that fast, I couldn't see how it could improve. It didn't.

It's also likely the author has never been to Lake Powell (Payson might have). I don't know anywhere at Lake Powell you can tie up your houseboat in deep canyons and have access to your car by just walking to it. There is a beach at Wahweap where you rent your houseboat and leave your car in a parking lot, but any canyons are way more than a few river miles away from that marina. Since the author mentioned an Arizona sunset, Wahweap is the only AZ marina with car access at all and no canyons in sight. The others in AZ aren't accessible by car. Same goes for Hall's Crossing and Bullfrog in Utah. A nitpick for a stroke story, but still details are important. Though I've been to Lake Powell many times, I checked to make sure all of this could be discovered via google and google Earth. It is, so that's pretty basic research for a story.

Some authors seem to specialize in finishing others stories. They nearly all have a hollow contrived feel to them. It's difficult to pick up a thread from another author so why bother? Why not just write your own story. You certainly didn't need to piggyback on the Lake Powell story to write a stroke story about wife swapping. It probably would have been a far better effort than this as well.

Thanks for the effort, though. I hope you write more.

Including going into the comments and tagging a coda onto someone else's story that reads like he's a judgmental ass.

your's is A STEP AHEAD !

Harry in VA's Witness

Not to mislead, this is a well written story, but the premise, for me at least, is stupid. You simply cannot fix a troubled marriage by bringing someone else into the mix. Also if they swing the husband can't use adultery as a reason for the divorce. A story about stupid people doing stupid shit just doesn't have any interest for me. Someone else though might find this right up their ally.

Disgusting