All Comments on 'Lara & Adonis Ch. 02'

I really am starting to love this story. But please make the the story other then that great work and looking foreward to the next chapter

with the previous commenter, you did better on this chapter. I wish I could help w/an editor but I am in no way able to act as an editor for anyone. If I hear of anyone I'll pass your name on.

As for the story, I wish it were longer. Posting 1 page every month is going to make it hard for me to remember. I'm hoping that by having the character Adonis my brain will click much quicker. The story over all is interesting. I don't think I've come across anything like it before. So you get bonus points for creativity. I do look forward to the next chapter and I want to wish you much success as an author!

I got confused with how the story jumps it doesn't seem to flow. But overall it's a fine story congrats

I am planning on uploading another chapter I've been very busy with school midterms but I am uploading very soon I don't have internet access right now so I am getting everyone's emails the through my phoneI am getting everyone's feedback about how they are willing to be my editor and I'm very excited about that so I'm very sorry for the wait it won't be much longer I promise!

Also thank you so much for constructive criticism!

With the next chapter

Another good start, but you are jumpinh around to much. It's hard to follow to story. I found myself lost seve times and having to go back and reread parts. Try to read over the story a few times after you have finished the whole thing. It'll give you an idea of what needs to be added or changed a little better