by themanred
Ok, the first chapter had great potential and I'm all for a slow burn but at this point it's starting to get boring. If you're going to write an erotica story, you really need to include some actual erotica and not just tiny vague hints. I do appreciate the descriptiveness and attention to detail, just please pick up the pace a bit. The story still has potential, but you really need to start moving things along next chapter or you'll likely lose your audience.
This chapter was a bit slow and just cruel without being erotic. It's a fine line between erotic non-consent and just being mean, but I think this chapter was a bit on the wrong side of that line.