All Comments on 'Laura Seduces Her Black Stallion'

Great story would be even better in the first person.

Great first story. I hope you submit more.

Life's too short... And this story has way too many cliches. Starting with the absolutely gorgeous 39 year old wife married to this horrible husband/person who just happens to be a senior partner at the best law firm in New York. To continue the theme we also have to have the brilliant Ivy league educated black man who works out every day and everyone loves. So what do you think is going to happen next? BTW did you forget that the head of the company's HR dept was at this party? The other odd thing about this story is the uncalled for comment about black women.

But seriously in need of a proof read. It looks like you rewrote some sentences but didn't delete unneeded words. Several times you ran two sentences together. Mistakes such as these change the flow of the story.

You are a slut and I can't wait for your husband to leave you!

Laura love the details..Grrrrrrrrrrr what a tramp..Perhaps Bruce can persuade his black brother's to cum fill slutty Laura's hungry orifices with baby juice..

Can't wait...

Congratulations on a very good story. It would benefit greatly from some good editing, but it still manages to be a fine read. Please do clean up the writing just a bit to make it more seamless for the reader. Otherwise, it is quite well done and deserving of a five star rating for your first effort!

This story was horrible. In so many ways.

If you want a story that goes; White bitch fucks black stud, then that's what you got.

But this cliché riddled stale is so full of mistakes it's barely readable. Not just grammar and spelling but a definite lack of realism.

'Ole stud boy thinks he's gonna take his bosses job in a short time? I don't think so. He's still a fucking intern. He has time to go to the gym for an hour each day? He's an intern in the biggest law office in N.Y.. He's lucky if he has time to take a crap each day.

the clichés are bad enough but then you have the poor grammar-spelling-syntax and punctuation adding to the horrendousness of this story. why cant the slut wife just divorce her husband if she hates him so much? she'll get at least half of everything in the settlement plus alimony and child support if they have children.

stupid and barely worth one star

Black women are much better in bed than white women. I've had both and I ended up marrying a black woman. she is the best I've ever had. She told me about how the bbc is a myth tho I already knew that

I found this story surprisingly erotic. It's the first one I've read in this genre and I never expected to become as aroused as I did. I just never had an interest in this area. Now I do because of Laura and her stallion!

Came across this story and it really got me going. I had to stroke a little while reading. It was a great find, I'm looking forward to finding more!

Hot story. Detailed i think from a white mans fantasy. A little exaggerated with the dialect. Those of us whom have wives who are truly bbc sluts can tell right away. But if at sometime your wife does take a 9 inch black cock,she will definately never be the same woman ever again. So keep that in mind and do enjoy your fantasies thru your stories as you stroke your white cock doing so. If such a time does occur that your wife does go black, that will be all you will ever do with your inferior anatomy. Trust me when I tell you this. White women who go black for sexual fullfillment will indeed stay black. And that my friend is fact.!!!! I speak from experience in this regard..

I enjoyed every word, so what if there were some grammar issues etc, I can live with that, They were minor, and didn't spoil the story, even if it was somewhat formulaic. I gave this tale a 5 Star rating.

Very hot. please read my e-mail

Well-written and very hot and steamy. Ending was too good.

Storyline is ok. But the outcome is really bad. Some guys point it out. Spelling and grammar is in need of improvement. This permanent black and marriage fetish, spoils the story. The progress of Laura in the story is also a bit over the top. And not realistic too. Looks like the rich guy is part of the underclass, because no one cares for him after the knock out, not even his wife. Then she dissapeared from the party for a long time. They have very sweaty sex so both would need a shower. Not to mention the used and cumstained bed. And i think a clever woman wouldn´t do pics with her lover showing her infidelity. Bruce super man could blackmail her and hubby has no problem to divorce if he get knowledge.

So this could be a good story. But you only reach readers who don´t see the bugs in it. Good thing is this is only 2 pages long. Maybe your other work is better. I will read it.