by fittucker87
I know that this is an old story, and that the author hasn't updated his profile in more than five years... but this is a funny and sexy story!
A fantasy of course, but why NOT a nice lawyer and a really sweet porn star/stripper?
I like them both, and I wish the story had been longer.
Only negative, I hate smoking. Smelling it, seeing it and reading about it...
Who is Sara? (What is her full name???)
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Great effort. I though the weasle was going to unpleasantly ruin it, so was pleasantly surprised when Sara decided to dump him. Fun start to more I hope!
Nice buildup and good story but needed some actual tittyfucking and a pt 2
For a first piece of work, I am very impressed. You need to print a copy of your story and proof read before you post.
"Spellcheckers" don't catch any mistakes if you spell the word correctly. Thanks for the read; good characters and potential for a good series. The graduate degree could put you as a professor in law school.
...please check your spelling! I'll presume that you're not REALLY a lawyer, but really elementary mistakes (e.g. "your" for "you're") spoil even the best stories. As so many comments on this site say - GET AN EDITOR!
Hi. I'm Kelly and I'm 18 and live in Canada. Different boyfriends have done this to my boobs and if I can help you write a story about the things they did to me just email me at kellypam18@aol.com and I'll try to help. You can IM me on aol. Just use kellypam18 for my ID. Thanks
the name is a bit cliche, eh. But a very decent start to a series, IF you can make them non-repetitive. Take it somewhere, don't meander, the fucking is important, yes, but so it the plot here.
That Trent is nothing but i will be waiting on the next chapter from your story you only made one mistake in your spelling in the word know you had no in place of it.
Pat
Nice fun read. Glad to see Trent the weasel gets dumped and even more glad that Sara was the one to decide that and to see his flaws.
I am keen to see how the other strippers react to him, now that Sara will probably out his "little" secret!
Hoping for more!
I like the way you've developed the characters so far. The writing is good and the story has a lot of potential. Thanks for a fun read, and I'll look forward to the future installments.