All Comments on 'Leaders of the Pack Ch. 03'

much bettr then the 2end part was able to follow it you jumped around far to much in the 2end chapter

That was a great chapter. PJ xx

I'm glad that you've come back to the story and didn't make us wait so long this time. It was a little short but that didn't stop me from enjoying what was there. Thanks for writing.

have just spent the whole night reading the whole first book and the 3 chapters of this one, have to say fantastic wish i could buy them in print much easier to read than on screen lol. Keep writing and we will keep reading

Hope the finals went well!

You're on a roll! The story is shaping up nicely and cannot wait to find out what happens. Thanks for writing!!

Hi Secret you,

I haven't looked into it for a while after you concluded the series last time, and even though it was ages ago, I'm only now finding out the 4 newer chapters. My, you've done it again. Your fun, full bodied (no pun intended), interesting and suspenseful writing is such a breath of fresh air in the usual crap posted by most horny morons in the literotica site. It's so nice to read a sexy story that's not completely inadequate or retarded crap. The more I look through the site, the more I appreciate your contribution. Please write more!

Second story is full of drivell and bullshit. More filler and mindless attempts to pull off the setting of a plot that contain useless and vile writing. secretyou, if you do keep up with things here, then I REALLY hope your editor handed you your ass on a damned platter for presenting the shit you have written here. This is worse than a B grade Hollywood movie plot crossed with all of the bad dialogue and acting of an eighties porn movie!!!!

Pull the shit off the list and re-write it. Grow a set and admit you have no way to continue the brilliant work you started with the first story!!

What a load of crap LO_pan. serously you need to take a chill pill dude. if you dont like the story then guess what? theres hundreds of thousands other that you can choose to read. just because you dont like something doesnt mean its crap it just means you need to expand your mind a bit. in other words bugger off LO_PAN

Dude, if your going to criticize something, at least be constructive in your writing. That way, shit gets done

why is it that every time i see that you have a comment it is tell the writer their story is crap? You don't even HAVE 1 story up. SO to quote my mom quit your bitching and try it your self!!!

Your mom sounds like fun :)

In the immortal words of my grandfather; "You can take your opinion, and blow it outta yer ass!"

I think that sums up my feelings quite well. ^_^

I am glad to see that you are adding chapters to the story. There are errors, but you did warn everyone that this was a first draft. I like the banter between the characters. Also I really hate Jenna now more than ever. The term Dire Bitch fits perfectly. I want to thank you for being so willing to entertain all of us with your words. And yes while everyone has a right to their opinion the majority of us like what you post. Some of us even vote and try to give constructive advice. Keep writing and I for one will keep reading and enjoying.

Thanks Again

Sherrylee

lo_pan, your an asshole.

Anonymous poster, your grandfather is awesome.

And secretme, keep doing what you do. I love your stories and I'll be keeping an eye out for more.

Sincerely, Rod

Love th first part of the story this part not so much