All Comments on 'Learning Something New Ch. 01'

A quick note: the story should work without detailed measurements of your characters. Does it matter if she has a 27" waist? Tell me about her as part of the story.

Measurements just tell me "I'm a guy and there's these chicks in my fantasy and here's what they did..."

I'm sorry not sorry if there's good writing past this but painful learning has proven time and again that when you see measurements at the beginning of a story, there's nothing worth reading part them.

I can't wait to read where this is going!

Please hurry up and write another chapter!!!!

Thank you for the feedback,

I understand where your coming from but some people like a visual of the characters prior reading. However i will take it on board in the future

Forgettable.

Please let me acknowledge that this is your first story and encourage you to become better. There is a legendary author on literotica, name Colleen Thomas, who has written a paper on How To Write Lesbian Sex Scenes, which may be of help. It is also worth noting, Ms Thomas past several years ago but her influence lives on. All the best to you if you continue to write.

Really need part 2 NOW!