by Sky_Wolf
Your setup is fantastic. It can be an awesome story, especially as the kid grows to be formidable. Can't wait for the rest! Thank you for writing it.
I like where this story is heading. It's all intriguing, and a good read thus far. A few things could be better but overall very enjoyable!
Good little start you have here, there isn't much so far but what you have is of a good quality.
I would recommend that you try and find an editor to help you in the future, to pick up any minor mistakes and make points flow better (everyone should use one when writing stories anyway). At this stage though, you aren't in dire need of one.
Keep up the good work
Short but nicely written and good so far. Will keep a look out for more chapters.
It was quiet short but i still enjoyed the story. I felt the writing was fine and hope you keep it up. It did however feel a little cheesy but that okay.