All Comments on 'Let's Dance Ch. 01'

by Jay5555

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don87654don87654almost 20 years ago
This needs a continuation....

Where is the rest of the story?

boogieman10469boogieman10469almost 20 years ago
When's part 2 available?

Reminds me of my frat house days! Only wish I could have had myself a few hot, mothers to fuck!

jimd51jimd51almost 20 years ago
Really good start--needs serious finishing.

I hope you are not going to leave us hanging with what happens next--Please continue it!!!!!

The only complaint I have is that it could use some editing, most of the typos and such are easily skipped over but some of them do get distracting, thus drawing the readers mind out of the story.

But it is definately worth the effort.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 20 years ago
Good story - Poor Grammer

Please take your time in your next submission to proof read your work. I am looking forward to the next chapter.

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago

part 2?

wiseowl1955wiseowl1955over 11 years ago
Good, but...

Your story was good, but the spelling and grammar was deplorable. There are many editors available who will help you write correctly.

johnstang2johnstang2over 4 years ago
Sigh

Great start but I have one question - where is the rest of it? What happens upstairs?

blackhawk_53blackhawk_53about 2 months ago

Good start. Needs more parts.

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