by Jay5555
Reminds me of my frat house days! Only wish I could have had myself a few hot, mothers to fuck!
I hope you are not going to leave us hanging with what happens next--Please continue it!!!!!
The only complaint I have is that it could use some editing, most of the typos and such are easily skipped over but some of them do get distracting, thus drawing the readers mind out of the story.
But it is definately worth the effort.
Please take your time in your next submission to proof read your work. I am looking forward to the next chapter.
Your story was good, but the spelling and grammar was deplorable. There are many editors available who will help you write correctly.
Great start but I have one question - where is the rest of it? What happens upstairs?