All Comments on 'Lexi Classified Ch. 01'

S-H-I-T.

When two or more people get together, in life or in a story, something magical happens. They TALK.

The way this is shown in written stories is that what they say - it is called 'speech - is shown by enclosing it in "speech" marks, otherwise it can't be distinguished from the descriptive part of the 'story'.

Stories that omit 'speech' tend to be boooorrrriiinnnnggggg!

Like this one!!

Total garbage. Do your parents know you're writing this step? PLEASE don't inflict us with anymore pathetic trash like this? 1 star is too many.

FireLizard55

Thanks for the feedback as this is my first time. I'd love to hear more from Anonymous that fucks his daughter three times a week. That sounds hot. Are you published?

I see where it heading, good setup ... these people probably need cheat codes for a video game because they are impatient. It's almost as if you have a car and you are they only means for transportation but they want to drive it. Then complain about putting gas in the car...

Thank you so much for the encouragement.

Wood stoves throw off a lot of heat especially in a single wide. It's like you chose a subject and a setting you know nothing about. You can not break your Hyman on your sneaker. How would that even work? Not given a single reason why she would continue to even go see this sick fuck. You have him being a sick fucker then try to make him nice and he is thinking of what he's doing to her? Can't have it both ways. People talk except in this story. Start writing what you know first and get good at that the. Try other stories.

Thank you for your feedback. I'll start by saying that my stories are comprised with facts and fantasy/ fiction. One of the truths in my story is how I tore my hymen. I'm not really sure why it's so difficult to believe. Are you female? I was running and tripped. I literally fell with the edge of the sole of my sneaker under me, tearing my hymen. Perhaps it would have made the story more compelling to lye and say my father busted my cherry while fucking me? Also, the double wide trailer had an add-on living area with a wood burning stove. I didn't really feel like that part of the story needed an explanation. As far as conversation, well, a lot of what I write didn't actually happen, although I fantasize that it did. I'm just an amateur trying to put my fantasies into words.