All Comments on 'Lifeline'

I'm not one to often comment, but this story has caught me literally.

Great read, could do with a possible 2nd part to carry on the story with maybe a marriage to Myra

fantastic story, loved it and would love to read some more chapters.

Liked the story.... but ended way too early, u couldve wrote so much more, dragged it out for a few more chapters at least. Hope you think about it

Really quite lovely and possessed of the tang of reality.

I nearly wept.

Please write a follow-up, describing their first ménage to-gether. That would bring things to a satisfactory conclusion. Then just leave it there.

Masterfully rendered. Some occasional glitches. But overall, poetic, lush and lyrical.

yeah the ending fell flat unless you plan on continuing. it was great up until then. hope the depression he fell into plays into them boosting his spirits and knocking them up or something.

Just wonderful, loved it

Thank you for crafting this tale and sharing it with us. I felt Kyle's depression and his secret desire for Cece. The twist in the tail was exquisite however, I have to agree with other comments: that ending was just a little too abrupt and maybe another page might have done the trick.

But never mind, you get the full 5 * from me.

Really enjoyed reading this one. Keep up the great work!!

A really great story. Fully agree with qdata's comments. Looking forward to reading more of your work.

Your writing, which avoided so many cliches but rather adressed raw emotions in a splendid manner, really took a grip on me.

There obviously was a potential for developing the story somewhat more - or at least a little slower - after exit from the hospital, but the story was still OK and long enough as is. So now that you actually ended the story where you let it end, I think that should probably remain the end.

Great Story and you have the know how for writing an erotic love seen. But the ending left me somewhat disappointed. Will be watching for more of your writings.

I don't know what else to say. Nicely done and thanks for sharing.

I hope you continue with this !

4 stars, but would have been a 5