All Comments on 'Light of Dawn Ch. 06'

I've loved your other stories, from the little semi gothic Night Shade --- actually, that little odd story (the writing was not that great but I thought the conception of the story was a very nice one) --- to the longer series, Family Room?,,, <p>

But this one, Light of Dawn, it's a total loser. Seriously, I'm not saying this to be unbelievable or to piss you off or any thing. Again, I like your other stories. There's no nice way to say nice things about this story; and if you're honest, you'd probably even agree, WHILE you're trying to keep at it at night,,, It's a total loser as a story, with loser characters and all... <p>

Why don't you quit this loser and go on to another conception that is better?

only if you can lead us out of this and to a happy ending. If this series has a tragic ending I can ensure you one less reader, and more importantly one less voter.

Also, don't mind the naysayers. This has been up till now better than all of your other works.

This IS different from your other works, but there's nothing wrong with different! I'm loving everything about this series, from the two main characters, to the conflicted emotions. Ignore those that can't deal with different, let them go read the same old re-hashed stories. You are an amazingly gifted writer.

~Chargergirl

Another well written chapter. I hope the brother comes home in time to save his sister. I also hope that this story has a happy ending for the two siblings after all they have been through they deserve it.

1. Dawn is smart

2. Dawn is stupid

Make up your mind. She was raped. Oh no, he blackmailed her. Please read #1. You say the rape was integral to the story. I won't find out.

Dont listen to that stupid comment about the characters being losers. I think this is your best story so far. I like the complexity of the main characters. Though I must say the rapist makes for a rather cliched villain.

Dawn wasn't actually raped. Go back and re-read for context, please. Duh. This is such a great story.

fantastic buddy.

ok so the ending kind of drove me off but i understand the reason why you might have done it to show there true love for each other but i still love this story u are a great writer

Even though you intimated that you don't support non-consent/reluctant sex encounters (RAPE!!!!)..... I still hate that you felt it necessary write that scene. Jase deserves to rot in hell for that little stunt. So does Jeff btw. He's a colossal ass.

I would give anything to be able to cause any amount of pain to Jace up to and including death. Mabey fucked in the ass by a lot of sharp objects, so much that he bleeds out from his ass. And all the while reminding him that he was the author of his own demise.

which made numerous unfortunate people who happened upon this shit waste their own probably more precious time.

I cannot believe that I was suckered into this shit!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

not a big fan of the rape scene - but we'll see where it goes. it is well written, and if the drama ends well, then great. i gave you 5 stars because i hope there's a better part to this story, and you're a great writer.

Yuk, horrible rape scene. Disgusting!!!