by goldendragan
i do love this story so far.. i think its really wonderful and I love the fact that when you post .. you post a lot.. wonderful story so far cant wait to find out what happens next..
If you will excuse my language fan - fucking - tastic. Shades of Oblimo w/ a helping of whitesabre. Loved it, keep up the good work.
More! please more!.....i love the characters in this story, it makes it addictive i can't wait to read more,like seriously!!
Thanks, love your sense of humour, Nice characters, really good story.
P.S. I wouldn't be eager to become a that kind of princess, me? jewels, clothes, a lot of people dying to do what I say? nah!! hahaha
I love your narrative voice. It's personal, funny, evocative. You're not only a writer, you're also a storyteller. The one switch to Ray's POV bothered me. His POV would be better done with dialogue, I think, so you can stay in first person. You've got to stop trusting your spell checker to recognize the difference between homonyms. ;) Don't quit.
This is the second time I have read these chapters because I got tired of waiting for the new posts. Also, I thought "why not read them and refresh my memory of the plot line?" Now, I am no accomplished writer but my mind keeps wondering as to how this story will unfold, and I am waiting on pins and needles, all over again I might add, for the next chapters. Please finish this story, I beg of you! Put me out of my agony!
This is the funniest, best written story I have read in a while. Please post more!