All Comments on 'Lily's Awakening Pt. 01'

Overall, a very nice story with the potential for some interesting plot twists in later chapters.

I recommend making some edits on this chapter because there are several spelling errors.

I look forward to later submissions.

Nice way to start the day. Came twice in a few minutes. Could have been 3 if grandpa would have fucked her. Waiting for more. My dick is ready!

Wish grandpa had a go first then maybe both cousins . Look forward to more of this story .

Is it possible you really don't know that dialogue must have quotation marks? I think even a third-grader knows this. In case you don't, here:

-What do you mean by pleasure yourself pappy?

SHOULD BE: "What do you mean by pleasure, pappy?" See how it's done?

That an eighteen year old wouldn't know what an erection is and thinks her "pussy" is only to pee through makes me think this is thinly disguised kiddy porn.

Had to give this a 1 star rating, as there's no 0 rating.