All Comments on 'Liquid Bullets'

Very interesting story. Nice how you left room for a sequel, but not making it necessary to have a sequel.

story with a great plot--very intense and emotional. The plot was so strong that the sex was almost secondary to me. Excellent job.

Too long and too repetetitive. Technique wasn't that good

... but I wanted to post a comment anyway, to say that I enjoyed the clever expressions you used along the way, like: "Any other time, he would have welcomed a sight such as hers, sans weapon." Or "She shook more water from her face and her hair, a crazy anti-rain dance that disturbed the people in close proximity." Good stuff.

A good read and I thought it was pretty original with a good twist at the end. Had no idea what was going to happen next. Technically it needs a little proofing/editing to polish the story a bit but everything is here with the plot, characters and pace. Good work!

Havsumfun

Good one!

Missing a pretty important tag; story was fine until the other dude was involved.