All Comments on 'Lisa Invisible Ch. 04'

A wonderful story! Very interesting. I enjoyed it

Very creative. Well written. Great story.

Not your "usual" invisibility story. Nice twist.

Hated the reflection twist, or at least hated how she just kept freaking out and all of a sudden she lives in a reflective world of mirrors. "Holy shit, that little kid has a Gameboy. He must be able to see me! AAHHHH!!!"

There's just one small flaw in that she should have seen herself much earlier in such things as, well just about any piece of glass she walked by.

Didnt like the reflection twist, but great story over all. Good job!

An interesting twist to the invisible enf scenario. Any chance you'd make a series of this or is Tina and Kayla the end of the road?

Tina and Kayla are definitely going to keep on going. Due to how names work here, I can't go back and edit this. The series now in my head is known as "Troubles with Science" and the star could change. Yet going forward, I seeing it being Tina and Kayla more. In retrospect, I don't like Lisa all that much. I wrote her poorly, and to me she's just not as likable. The next two or three ideas I have for this series involve the couple, though future stories could also have completely new characters too. Basically, this series is just to toy around with the sci-fi esque themes of stripping and ENF. The mysterious science building will probably be the only guaranteed recurring character =P

That's great! Looking forward to the next story. Was hoping Alex would get some playful payback on Lisa though. Been thinking of how that would play out since reading this and the sequel. LOL!

Anyway, good luck on the series. :D

The plot twist though. I liked how everything just crumble slowly, the fact that she was invisible but not really. She's practically a reverse vampire. A very interesting story. I was hoping that he would revisit Alex and continue where he left him. It would be a whole new experience. Maybe have a story about Alex POV on the next one. I'm sure he's looking forward to feel her again.