All Comments on 'Lisa is Auctioned Off'

You have two stories with interesting themes and the material you are working with has great potential to be different and engaging. The wrtitng is a fairly vanilla narrative style, passively describing the evolution of events. (The preview for this story actually is a bit of a spoiler, so it didn't engage me strongly.) A little dialogue would help engage the reader and challenge the writer. Readers need to get a sense of a story arc, i.e. where it is going but with uncertainty of the future, leaving them earger to learn the erotic developments. Write more. You have good subject matter that wants for more dramatic flare.

Not a finished story. It would be interesting to me if you returned to writing and turned it into a finished product.