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That was great.

But practice on the writing.

"Ralph had been a long-time friend of mine for the past 7 years." The sentence contains redundancy: "long-time" and "7 years" refer to periods of time but they shouldn't be used together. Use one, but not both, in a sentence. For example, 'Ralph and I have been friends for the past seven years' or 'Ralph and I are long time friends.'

Spell out numbers below 10. That is, write seven rather than 7.

Thanks for the feedback on my writing. Great to have the detailed examples / suggestions. :-)

I am a keen photographer a I would love to have a photo shoot like this story !

What a HOT SEXY SENSUAL story...captured the incredible naughty forbidden intoxicating rush of the pure pleasure of a but...or butts...LOL!!!!

Very hot story, but "Slowly, Ralph gently started to anally fuck his wife's tight virgin asshole." Sheesh?

Did I find this story stimulating? LOL, that's an understatement! Terrific story, scorching hot.

Hot, very HOT!

Amazing! This was written in such a way that it could be pictured like being there in my minds eye

Great Story, one of the BEST