by jim1kp
What an awesome story...superb authorship here. You've gotta write more!! This is absolutely fantastic, great characterisation and well crafted. Top marks!
It is not up to me to comment about the flaws in your stories. I come here to read about things that 'turn me on'.
Frankly, not many of the stories here do! I have read two of yours and both have been very enjoyable. I like the way I can become part of your story, but I must confess that the young lady's age is subject to my imagination. Good Stuff!
Like the last comment, I was enthralled throughout the story. Content is all that matters to me - not flaws.