All Comments on 'Little One Ch. 02'

As always, you never know if, once the first chapter of a swries is posted, if it will continue. And I am so glad this one did! Please, keep writing. It is a lovely story.

I am speechless and mentally scarred for life.. . .

Boring stupid it actually made my dick limp please stop

Editor required asap! Dear God where to being. I understand you are young and learning but you have to read through your work. Just because a crappy writer made millions writing erotica does not mean that everyone else should jump on the band wagon. You have an idea, a story line, that can be workable but your writing is no where up to publishing on this site yet. Yes this is good practice but read what you wrote. Grammar, spelling and reference errors from soup to nuts. ...phrasing....It was good that her left side ribs were not broken because it is where her lung(s) are....have you any idea of the human anatomy? Do you know what is in your chest cavity? Two lungs, unless some very strange birth defect or surgery removing one. And one is on the left and the other...the right! As a writer you make a comment, you look it up and research it. Please I'm not saying stop writing I have no business telling you that. But please give me something worth reading. Good luck!

I immediately felt the urge to pray

As a little/pet, I was so glad to find this story. He reminds me of my daddy... I almost cried while reading it. He's a very good master.

Please keep writing.

I get calling her pet but who the hell actually wants to pretend they're fucking a dog?

show just how little you know about sex and love. I gave this a 5 for content and effort. And you dear asshole of lit I spit and piss on!!

Why wouldn't she just bite his dick off the first time he puts it in her mouth? Or the first time she gets a shot at his balls, kick them through his throat and be done with this nonsense. You've had her capitulate completely, like she is suffering from Stockholm Syndrome. There's simply nothing sexy or erotic about it. It certainly isn't fun or entertaining to read. 1 star.

I'm not sure what to say about this. I mean, I'm a total sucker for a nice love-hate relationship between master and slave, but this is not erotic. I think it should have been put in Non-Erotic. Also isn't Cleo a cat name?

Great story!

And he is a lovely master but you can't make a girl into a real puppy? Or should be a role play puppy? Is sound like she is a puppy and not a girl anymore...is sad if you make her 100% puppy and not a girl.

My only problem was why would he be so worried about her not talking if when she does he turns around and tells her she can't. Stupid

I'll admit that she gives in very quickly, but this is fantasy! If this means we get to the training quicker, I'm all for it! People tend to rate stories badly when it's not their cup of tea. I don't read stories that aren't something that appeals to me. I think bad ratings should be reserved for those authors in need of an editor or who just really aren't good story tellers. Neither of these are you! Please continue your story! It makes my pussy throb!

Thank you for updating! I loved the first chapter of your story, and I was so excited when I checked today and saw that you had written more! I think this is a great story - I like how you bring out both the care taking side and the dominance/control aspect of the relationship. It's hard to find stories that have this combination of bdsm sexiness and also the fluffy romance. I can't wait to read the next chapter!

To avoid some of the hurtful comments, this should be on fetish, or bdsm, or non erotic or somewhere, far far away... lol sorry about that

Omg. I just learned that there is such thing as 'pet play'. I'm quite alarmed. One more little step, might as well turn it to bestiality lol, kidding.

But do please continue, some people are excited where this will end up to

If petplay offends everyone this much, they need to get off this website. Yes it's a fetish, yes it's a kink, it might not be your kink, but that has nothing to do with the quality of this story. I second whoever made the comment about "don't read stories that you're not interested in". I think it could go in either fetish, bdsm, or non-con, but regardless, if a story you're reading includes a kink you're not into - stop reading it! And for everyone attacking the realism - do you have any idea how many stories on here include 9" dicks fucking a girl's ass with no lube for the first time, or other similar impossibilities? Keep writing, honey, the story is great.

OMG I NEED MORE THIS IS SO AMAZING. It's so sweet but still erotic it's so beautiful. 😍

OH DEAR LORD PLEASE MAKE MORE I AM IN LOVE

Sorry to nitpick, but people have 2 lungs, situated on both sides of the chest. An army medic should know this.

Please please please write more!))) This staff is so good)

Please keep writing. I love this story so much. I want to see how Cleo is trained. Please don't stop writing

This story was verry good

It leaves you thinking of what could be done

I to would to hear about Cleo trianing

Also like to see how far you can take her and was she worth the cost

Again very good

Thanks

I love how u started this story . I do hope u continue.

I hope you're planning on continuing this story, you can't just end it like that! haha please write more :)

Please Update!!!! This is a great story!!!

I'm having fun reading the master's interaction while Cleo heals. Also her cute reaction in upcoming submissive play. Definitely gonna wait for more.

Please you should make another one its been like a year!

He's not much better than those who abducted her in the first place. To keep her and turn her into a puppy when he knows she was abducted and severely abused makes him as much a criminal as the others.

It's been forever, please keep going, it's so good!!

Treating your sub as a dog is a sick perversion of bdsm. Disgusting to the max.

I'm sorry but I'm a sub and absolutely love being treated like a pup it's wonderful and freeing. Love your story please keep writing

Much love Autumn the pup :)

Your story is very nice but I don't think you should be making a person a dog its very confusing..... I don't belive in such but other than that great work

I cannot understand people who read stories tagged with categories they know they don't like and then have the audacity to leave negative comments complaining about how they didn't like it. For fucks sake, don't read it then and while you're at it, go kink shame somewhere else! An EROTICA website is hardly the place to get the vapors over somebody else's idea of a good time. It's really easy to get on here and bitch about somebody else's stories but it's hard to be the one actually putting yourself and your work out there for others to read. Little_Otter, I rather enjoy your writing style and you've definitely shown improvement between the first part of this story and the third one, which is where I was originally going to leave this comment, before I decided it was more relevant to this comment section here. Don't let any of these judgemental fucks steal your joy in storytelling. You keep on doing you and don't let the unhelpful and unkind thoughts of the anonymous peasantry get you down.

Trying to equate this to BDSM is ridiculous. I hope she guts him in his sleep he’s as much of a monster as the people who kidnapped and tortured her. The female character was physically and mentally abused and broken and he’s perpetuating her abuse. Trying to claim otherwise is a joke.

Tess (uk)