All Comments on 'Little Ricky'

You have a good story going there, but the typos and bad grammar take a lot away from it. Ask someone to look at it and edit it for you next time. You could even have another chapter, keep the story going, when the secret gets out. All in all, not bad, just proof read, proof read, proof read.

Could've used better proof-reading, but I thought it was great. Hoping for a second part!

I will need a proof reader, but could not find one when I needed it for first part. Will try for 2nd.

Awsome start to the story Rick.. It;s yours to create and develope obviously! so please post the next chapter soon.. the one thing i love about the start is a subtlies of your innocent girlfriend relationship.. Subtle is hard to find with SPH! i really hope you can keep an awkward, empathetic feeling and power exchange between your girlfriend and you without making it like all the other SPH stories out there...

cheers

Wow, great story, this is what I like to see in a good SPH story.

Good story, though the ending ruined it.

love the story, reminds me of some of my own past experiences. Hope you keep sharing