All Comments on 'Little Slutty Sarah'

Please don't be discouraged. I think you should keep writing. But this needs an edit. Can these be edited after they're posted? In any case you should know that a young woman can be vulnerable, but not so much venerable.

she barely wore makeup, barley you make beer with.

Or Sophie wishes she were Sarah. Which is it Sophie? Great story. Let's hear more.

a bit confusing, though, when the father taunted Sarah under the name Sophie.