All Comments on 'Little Things'

This was incredible....such a build up..such visuals..so beautiful

IF you are using a Dragon to type/print your stories, perhaps an update is required. A couple of items appeared that made the reading and absorbing the content interrupted etc.; e.g. vile for VIAL, there for THEIR,,,

Did I read that right?: Use of Cocaine and the drugging of the girls rectum without her permission? This begs for a sequel to explain what happens when she discovers that twist.... and his drug problem... 5*

Dear "Grammar"

When assembling these stories, the ideas flow rapidly through the mind at a much faster pace then typing the words.

Thanks for pointing out the issues you noted.

I'll pay closer attention to proofing my work.

Katlyn

How can you be this good? It's incredible. It's like stepping through a portal of text into a small alterverse which totally replaces real world with authentic enough storytelling and helds the reader there all the way until the end of the story. Mesmerizing!

Your story is fantastic. The spelling is not. For example: You can "lose" a lover. The dog gets "loose" if gets out the gate. Definitely keep writing but get an editor too.

Do not like the coke. Not one bit. Otherwise story is great.

You spend too much time talking about things not related to the plot. You don't need to explain in detail her toilet routine, for example. It just wastes time and kills the sexual tension.

Most of the dialogue is pointless too.

could not help reading others comments and yes some of the spellings were incorrect where they were used. Overall though I found the story engaging and kept my attention to the end. Thank you for allowing an old mans fantasy to run free for a while.

I guess a lot of guys or gals fantasize about small women but I don't think you made enough of that feature of hers. And he considers himself a gourmet but comes over for Italian dinner and only brings champagne. No red wine?

I concur with the comment about coke. Where did that come from? And you didn't even follow up. Plus we never get a hint that he's into anal until she brings it up. No fiber in the ass before. No rimming her ass. No fantasizing about her riding his cock.

Honestly I'm now more interested in reading about the exploits of her sister. Maybe they can hook up for a threesome or foursome...

Dear anonymous;

You, were not there.

Katlyn

As noted in a prior comment, it kills the tension. Some of the actual dialogue kills the mood, too.

In reply to "annonmous" earlier, you said that, "You were not there." Was this a true story? Even more errotic if so. Good story in any case.

Wish words could describe reality ...

It really does mot matter to me. I think its a wonderful story. You did quite well in my opinion. I look forward to more. You deserved the rose.

Great story, loved the detail. Small thing: the word you want is 'vial' (a small container), not 'vile' (nasty, disgusting).

Also, I may have missed it, but was there a background explaining the "you art anal" conversation? Did we know before that (and did Sonya know) that she wanted to do anal?

Why was it necessary to bring drugs into a great story? Otherwise I enjoyed it very much.

Loved the whole plot, though seriously, delete the word penis from your vocabulary. Absolutely no one uses that word when talking about sex. Otherwise great.

david:- nikki is not woman enough since she is petite child woman

petites dont deserve love

david :- but nikki is women enough for some noncon anal pounding fetish of him aaah hypocrit author and david think petite are women enough when it comes for anal fuck othetwise petites needed to be ridiculed cause the author and david have disdain for petites

only blonde tall sluts like sonya deserve love and respect only tall blonde like sonya deserved to be called woman enough

spoiler alert:- david fucks both sonya and nikki in the ass has all the fun and decides to throw nikki for taller blonde sonya and only whore sonya is woman enough who betrayed her own sister w/o a 2nd thought

david hates the idea of child women as they are not worthy for any mans attention but does his best to fuck nikki asshole despite his notion about women child being less deserving women how hypocrit

why did he go for nikki if at the end he will betray her for sonya for being not woman enough or body shaming petites

spoiler:- all this character building and love story sucks cause he will cheat on her for whore sonya with the excuse that suddenly nikkis child women body doesnt seem good enough and her taller bimbo blonde sister sonya is the only deserving woman even though they both cheat on nikkis behind

all the people praising her story are going to regret when they read the next two chapters

Odd story but on the whole I liked it. However, the meal scene was badly done, nobody with low body mass necks alcohol like that and no one on a tight budget screws around with food the way this is written. Finally wtf did we have coke involved, pointless, stupid and shows D as an urban waster, not as a sophisticate as the author would have us believe, man-child in mind meets woman-child in body. Unimpressed and not reading the next episode.

There were a lot of good things in this story, but I was very disappointed by the cocaine use, especially him drugging her without her consent.