All Comments on 'Little Tish Ch. 09'

To a very interesting story. Looking forward to the remaining chapters!

This chapter exceeded all my expectations! I'm a huge sucker for the story part and details only mean added value so imagine my ecstasy when you dropped 7 pages worth of it, spiced with sweet girl-on-girl action of course. Pure and simple it made my day!!!

While Kathy did present some serious issues to both her past and Tishie & Jacks possible future, she was an immense hypocrite about it all. She had sex and a child with her first cousin, fled and lived with him despite the family objecting, had hot lesbian sex with her own daughter yet went and tried to play the moral flag-post for her kids. Therefore I just love how Tishie came out blazing with her ovaries of steel and not giving in to her moms demands, love might be blind but she did invest great deal of time and thought into their relationship and where it's supposed to go eventually. They might have come to some peaceful conclusion for now but I expect this confrontation to go on next time. And while all this is going on poor Billie is just sitting there getting it from all sides but also bearing the whole load of the situation, good thing she passed out after her massage or she' probably lost by now.

Jack coming home a lot sooner than anyone anticipated added so much potential to the story, not just for what he saw and could now exploit but also to confront both Tishie and their mother to stay true to their words and feelings. Damn I can't wait for the next part!

Of course 5* barely suffices to this extraordinary chapter, but damn am I giddy now!

Seven pages! It could only get better if it was more.

Looking forward to the next chapter.

I'm a big fan of detailed (usually multi-chapter) stories that have good character development and a good story progression. This story series in many ways has the potential to be one of those.

BUT

I have to agree with the comment made by Anonymous at the end of the last chapter that the constant repetition and recaps are becoming very off-putting.

This is Chapter 9 and is clearly marked as such. Any reader who discovers this story at this point, if they have half a brain, will surely realise that there's eight previous chapters that should be read before this one. You don't need to keep returning in such detail to events and scenarios that you've previously described.

It's a bit like many of the so-called "Reality TV" shows these days - each episode starts off with a recap of the previous one, there's a little bit of new stuff, then an ad break, then a recap after the ad break of what happened before the ad break then a bit of background stuff (often repeated from previous episodes) and then maybe a few minutes of new stuff before another ad break. Then repeat as necessary. So you find that (after you take the ad breaks and the recaps out) you've watched a 90 minute show which only had about 20 minutes of new stuff in it!

This last chapter was like that. Sure, 7 pages is impressive but, without going through a detailed analysis (which I can't be bothered doing), I'm guessing that only about 3 pages or so is "new" stuff.

For example, we already know the stories about how Jackie and Tish were conceived from previous chapters. You didn't have to detail it all again here in such detail ad-nauseum. Good cure for insomnia.

The problem with doing this so much is that you annoy your readers and throw them out of the story.

There's also problems with story continuity and inconsistencies which distract the reader from the story as well.

I'm looking forward to Chapter 10 to see how it pans out but if it has the same proportion of irrelevant repetition I don't think I'll bother to continue. Please drop the recaps and repeats and focus on the storyline moving forward and on the characters.

Very well done. Anon does raise some valid points. The usual disclaimers,advisories to read all prior chapters,etc.would suffice. I prefer longer chapters, though.your short ones do cover all the bases. Excellent character and storyline development. Keep going.

Lovely Story!

Very sensual and tender!

Again, I give you my 5*****Stars!

Looking forward to the remaining chapters and hope to see more Mother/daughter love in this loving story mmmmmmm

Wet wet kisses

Aunt Helena

55yo Lesbian Aunt from Portugal

Really well written and exciting, loved it!

I've read some great storties over the years, but this was one of the best. I hope to find chapter 1 so I can read how it all began.