All Comments on 'LOBO 5'

Very hot and extremely well written. I love incest control stories like this. Gave it five stars and a favorite point.

The premise is very good and the story is hot. There are several pronoun issues (his vs her) and typos (though vs thought and beast vs breast). Would definitely read more about this. Good job.

Don't waste people's time

Thank you so erotic to read. Great writing as also... Keep going, perhaps a continuation??? Very enjoyable...made me wet.... but then for us ladies that is the point.......

Pretty sure this belongs in the sci Fi/fantasy section if it wasn't for the invest being featured so prominently. Like the premise, well written plot, but lacking in detail work. And as has been mentioned some grammar issues. You need someone to do a soft edit to fix those grammar issues, since, as a writer myself, I know how hard it is for an author to spot his own errors.

I do like that you didn't fill this story to with a bunch of random gratuitous sex and kept a story flow, but the ending, you just sewed everything up and close it off. There is so much opportunity for more. You could definitely use a follow of this story. Maybe a rewrite, to expand upon what is already there. Good luck and thanks for the entertaining read.

but overall a fairly decent story.

I enjoyed this immensely! Very good indeed! Thank you.

bullshit

Fast paced, entertaining, worth a sequel

Nice little story. Glad I found it.

I assume the effects were permanent and it sounded as if his mother and sister were going to continue breeding with David and produce more offspring. I thought at first this might turn into a werewolf story and that would have disappointed me. The physical changes like elongated ears and swelling at the base of the penis (a knot?) are typical canine features. I would be interested in reading a sequel to find out if the features were passed along to David's offspring with his mom Cindy, sister Danielle and Helen. Thanks for a good read.

Need a story that takes place before the epilogue. Let it chronicle david conceiving the half dozen offspring. Loved it, wish david spent more time with cindy.

And Danni, the engineering major you had such high hopes for, she's dropped out of school to help take care of the kids David has fathered with her and Cindy."

This story has/had the potential to be an amazing story. You would probably want to do a little more backtracking. Showing him trying to get used to his new abilities, "fighting" the urge to impregnate everyone in the neighborhood, the move to Ojai. Anyway, was a good read but was rushed.

Please continue this

This was a very enjoyable, if short, story. I was wondering if you were considering a more fleshed out follow up to the the story line? Enjoyable nonetheless.