All Comments on 'Locker Room Rule'

I liked this story, but what happened to the pizza, lol

You need to find an editor. I is always capitalized and im is not I'm. Needs work on punctuations. "In class I couldn't stop thinking about her and me together." Should have read: "In class, I couldn't stop thinking about her and me together." While her and me sounds awkward, it is not wrong; but me and her together sounds better when reading it aloud. These are just some observations that an editor can help you with until you get a better grasp on writing for prose.

she called her a 5 to be there at 5 then took a shower at 3?

Good first effort...hard to think and translate and recapture the passion and excitement just the way you feel it.... keep writing...it will get better!!

Good storyline but written poorly. Lots of potential so continue trying...

My pussy got so wet reading that I am going to play with it

This was so amazing I came as they did