All Comments on 'London Girl'

This was a very good read. I couldn't help but get caught up in the story.

Great job.

Glad to have you back! As returns go this was as triumphant as they come. The characters were as real as ever and the pacing was top.

Your writing is the best.

I really hope for a mother son romance story. If not another brother sister one.

I am so freaking jealous! The story pace was excellent and the character development was like getting to know interesting people...natural and involving.

I'm going to give up trying to write and just read your stuff! ;-)

I love it, maybe a part 2 were Jo's pregnant??

Simply amazing!

Wow. Terrific.

I hope you're a professional writer because you've got the real stuff.

What detail and what seduction of the senses. Andy exuded charm and Jo exuded need--yet both satisfied each other. Loved how you built both up and finished with them together. Lovely detail mentally and physically. A 5 with no reservations! :)

Now this tory really has class, the slow burn only made the inevitable more memorable, the emotions were raw and genuine, the sex steamy and demanding, yet the impression it left behind was nothing but warmth and coziness. A true masterpiece.

5* is almost an insult!

This is one of the best stories I have read on this site. You have a gift that should be shared. Please write more stories. You have a great balance between the physical and the emotional. Thank you for sharing your talent.

Very good story! Need additional chapter(s)! Keep up the good work!

Everything you post is pure gold!

gem. Your stories are like warm, delicious treats. They stay with me. I smile when I remember them. An author can't ask for more than that; nor can a reader.

This was masterful. You built the tension so carefully, so smoothly, that I was carried along. Thank you very much for sharing this. I do agree that it could use another chapter or two, or three, or ...

The previous fifteen comments have already said most of what needs to be said. It was a sweet and romantic story.

As others have said, it developed well as the story progressed. But as well as that, it was brilliantly crafted and the writing was excellent.

I liked it.

L

This is the first of your works to come to my attention, I could not comment immediately as I went off to read everything else you have submitted first! Superb.

nicely done

I imagine Andy with a bit of blond chest hair to "brush over her breasts" in a very sensual way. She can trace her tongue through his chest hair and give him the thrill of licking. When she strips his shirt, I can imagine her eyes drinking in the sight of muscular lightly-haired chest. Wow! Long may they continue to love!

Why did you feel it necessary to give the lovers a cousin relationship and submit the story in Incest rather than Romance? To me, the cousin relationship was irrelevant and unnecessary -- it could just as easily have been that their families had been friends and the two had been childhood playmates.

I normally avoid Incest stories. I came to this one because of the favourable comments, which are usually a good guide to a worthwhile story. Without the Public Comments portal, as an old romantic I would have missed this gem.

L

I agree that some people will miss this story because it is listed as incest. It's a lovely romance written well.

I am a avid consumer of erotica. This story was one of the best i have come across in quite some time. Hats off to you. Gonna be your fan forever. Keep writing such exquisite stories. Loved it.

This beautiful story further cements onehitwanda to the top of the Literotica writers.

One of the most romantic stories I've seen on this site, and exquisitely written. Of the varieties of incest celebrated in Literotica, cousins is my absolute favorite---partly because their love CAN go somewhere, and partly b/c the biggest event in my life was my cousin! I'll look for more of your stories.

Wow!!! This is one of the most beautifully written things I've ever read. It was so good, romantic and well written. I've rarely read something written so well. It wasn't too much, not enough, just perfect. This piece is one of the things that make me go "I want more. I need more". Bravo!

I really liked this, but this is only the first chapter. You spent time setting up the relationship with Sophie, and I would certainly like to find out what happens when she notices the glow, etc. tomorrow.

Superbly written. Perfect.

We need more information on the agile methodology at Jo's work!

Wow that was sexy!

That was one damn hot story.

Loved every page.

love love love, hope thereis more coming. everything was perfect thoo

Perfect story! Crossing my fingers that there'll be a 2nd part to this story.

Only gripe I have about it - doesn't seem common for Brits to use "totes". I believe that's more of an American slang.

Reminded me of my story

Not a cousin but a long term crush

This has become my new favorite story. Please, please write more!

For whatever resason I can never a good romance story like this one. Keep em coming,

I found your story line, scene depictions, character development and the sexual escapades to be all a wonderful delight. One of the best stories ever. Have not checked your profile or stories written yet, but if your screen name is indicative of the sum total of your literary endeavors then your screen name is quite apt as this was a real gem.

Very well written, soft, sensual, and totally believable. The way you had Joanna describe her life in London was disturbing though. Your portrayal of the egos, the shallowness, the take all and give nothing attitude of the vast majority was far too accurate. After three years of misery I moved. One hundred and fifty miles away I discovered again what it is like to live rather than just exist.

As always, the story is well written, the build-up is masterfully done and the result is a moving, sensual, and thoughtful story of two lonely, almost broken, people finding that they complete each other. The climactic sex scene grows naturally out the story line, and is truly erotic, not pornographic. Finally someone who seems to understand or at least intuit the difference between eroticism and pornography.

As in Wanda's other stories the Leitmotiv is longing, the need to connect, to become one with someone one can trust, to experience the oneness that allows both partners to rest in each other and to open up to and experience the outside together: This is love. Intimacy is what love is all about, and it is celebrated on the altar of the bed lovers share. Well done, Onehitwanda. I love your stories.

'nuff said.

I don't generally go in for cousincest; I don't really think of it as incest at all. But it would be difficult for you to write something I wouldn't at least attempt to read and enjoy. And I did, in fact, enjoy it immensely. One small note: I think you may have overused the word 'murmur' a bit, but it isn't overly noticeable. At any rate, I hope you'll continue writing for us!

Props for your great writing! Your scenes were so vividly described I could imagine myself being there. And Jo is one lucky girl!

-Athena

The one critisism of your writing is that there isn't enough of it I've read all of your stories and still want more. They are so beautifully life like one can almost believe that you are present please publish more, there are more like me who await your creations.

Just discovered your writing and immediately fell in love with it.

I liked it but you should have skipped pages 1 - 3 and continued it with Jo in the mix.

...with the comment that you should have omitted pages 1-3. Without them, it would have been just another stroke story. But this - THIS was a work of art! The first few pages gave us a reason to care. You created very human, believable characters who made us root for them. Their ultimate union then became SO much more meaningful, fulfilling - and HOT!

I also disagree with those who didn't like the fact that the characters were cousins. I grew up separately from a first cousin and have been in love with her since shortly after we first met as young teens. Because of social mores and the fact we both eventually wanted children, I made the choice not to declare my love for her or act on it - but I know beyond doubt that it was and perhaps is mutual. Your story gave me a sense of what could have been (though we've both shaped alternate lives for ourselves and remain devoted friends).

Great work, Wanda - an easy 5 stars! You give me something to strive for with my writing.

Best regards,

AverageBear

I liked the detailed build-up to the hot sex.

As is usually the case darling you don't disappoint. A lovely combination of the romantic and the erotic. Thank you so much.

Loved every second of this, made feel so real as if was there enjoyed reading this from the first word right through to the last word. Amazing work

You got me going! I was giggling like a schoolgirl in the first chapters. And I felt so good throughout the way!! Super awesome!!

That was perfect. Utterly perfect. Everything just right, so beautiful. Thank you for this.

This could be the seed of a novel. It is good enough to be a mainstream novel, but would be oh so tasty as a erotic novel.

One of the finest stories I have read here!

Oh my God!!!!!! THAT WAS BEAUTIFUL!!!! Im so obsessed! I love love LOVE it!!! You have so much talent that it makes my soul ache! Keep at this lovely!!! xoxoxo

You really do have a serious talent for writing, and not just erotic writing. You have a great sense of pacing and style, and your way of painting and drawing the reader into your world is seamless.

I applaud you for this work of art, and I hope you continue to write!

A very good, well paced work of 'art'. You write wonderfully, and I do hope there will be more to this story.

!!!!7 stars!!!!

You're in my list of favourites, and for good reason. The stories you wrote before is beautiful and touching, and this is no exception. The way that a city can be a cold, lonely place, and the vacuousness of getting boozed up after work in London is captured perfectly. (Incidentally, I'm not a great fan of London. I much prefer Amsterdam, Rome or, indeed, Paris.) It's as much a story about transformation as it is about love, and of course, some good old-fashioned sex.

One small comment though: the characters mutter, murmur and observe a lot. At times, it distracted me from the story. Other than that, you wrote another hit.

WOW! What an excellent story. What a read especially when the grammar is correct. Your build up and back to the story supported all the paths the story took. Only one open path, her friend could be a bit peeved when she finally meets him, Ha! Ha! sorry for her.

Such a wonderful story. As it is set in London, I have really enjoyed this. But I come from a small town, and the small towns are just as lonely. When I lived in the City, everything was anonymous. Pedestrians on the street, coworkers, the server at the local coffee shop. All strangers and all going to stay strangers. I slept with strangers and woke up with strangers the next day. In the small town, you are isolated by familiarity. Everyone knows your business. Either much is expected of you because of who you are or family affiliations, or nothing is expected of you for the same reasons. Either someone or many someones want to sleep with me because of my family expectations, or nobody wants to for similar reasons. Everyone in every church knows your every sin and you know the Minister's past too well to hold him in the esteem you should be able to. I had to turn to family also for love and fulfillment and no one thinks oddly of a brother and sister living together. I love this loving family story. Thank you so much.

When I first read this I thought I was going to skip to the sexy parts, but your buildup, the romance part and everything was perfect. It really was an enjoyable read and their intimate moments definitely did not disappoint. Loved it so much thank you

This story really reflects my relationship with my cousin. Although I am now married with children, it doesn't beat the relationship I had with my cousin. The closeness, love, feelings for each other is just on a different level. The sexual satisfaction is different. When we used to make love, it almost felt like we were one. I guess that's what happens when you are blood related. We're still in love with each other until this day.

Lovely story and well told. You kept me in suspense until the very end. From your description of an orgasm I have to assume you are a woman. It was lovely to learn about an orgasm from the woman's point of view. Also, I am very impressed with your restrained word usage to describe very intimate imagery, without resorting to coarse language. Lastly, it was a pleasure to read a story without spelling or grammar errors. Again, well done!

Beautifully written. Thank you

Thank you isn't enough. Such a heartfelt story. Hopefully I will dream of such a love tonight.

Before I'd reached the second page, both main characters were real, full fleshed, with depth and substance...people I'd like to know.

I don't normally comment, actually, I never comment, but this was a great story, like it was a book and the characters were really fleshed out and you could almost see the characters. I just wanted to say you got great potential and you need to try writing some books and not just online for free, even though we do get to read it! Great story! Looking forward to another chapter!

This story is excellent.

It is one of those rare stories where the sex is essentially irrelevant and the emotion is in the rest of the story.

Well done and looking forward to seeing future writings.

Like other anonymous I nearly never comment but this was beautifully written.

Well done.

I never comment but this story was just so beautifully written that I had to share my thoughts.

The story was so realistic and hopeful. I really liked how the female character came alive because of his love and affection.

Thanks for sharing it with us.

I love the build up for the sex and this story alone made come..... I was just wondering if you could make a sequel because I would totally read it.

This story was so beautifully written that I wish it was a book. The characters were made for each other that if it was not mentioned you would have never known they were cousins which just added to the heat. Please write a sequel would like to see where their story goes from here.

I a new reader in LIT, and this is one of the my preferred stories. In my country, the love and marriage between cousins are legal (but with some problems), and I spoke about an European country. I think that story can be in Romantic also.

Please, keep in mind to write a sequel. I like your narrative, and as other comments, your explain well the feelings, and the sex scenes only give more emphasis to the story, but not are the base argument, the long time wait and the lovely seduction are!

My congratulations to the author

I apologizes for my English :)

Your ability is much like the ear of a musician. You are so gentle in the way that you slowly introduce your readers to the characters. You lead us through the story, much like a beautiful garden. You give us time to admire each flower, time to get to know each person in the story. That time and your beautiful mind creates a place for us to experience the rush of emotions, the hot desire expressed by these cousins. Thank you for the sacrifice that you make of your time, for the perfect gift that you hold out to us, your grateful readers!

Who could ask for more? Five stars.

I rarely read stories on lit anymore because I struggle to trawl through and find something worth actually reading. I don't even know why I decided to read this one, but I am most certainly glad that I did.

Your story sucked me and kept me reading right through to the end. Thank you so much for sharing your talent.

Well written, wonderful characters. I would love to see just 1 follow up to this one. it would be totally worth it. Thank you!

A great, intriguing read. Loved the plot, characters and the London setting brought back wonderful memories of my life there twenty years ago. At least another chapter please. Well written and I hope to read more of your work. Cheers, bravo..

... is that in the United Kingdom these lovers are free to marry

Which brings up a quibble: should a story be listed under "Incest/Taboo" when it features a relationship which is neither incest nor taboo in the country where the story takes place?

onehitwanda is the best author currently submitting stories to LIterotica.

You say "onehitwanda is the best author currently submitting stories to LIterotica."

There are several who are exceptionally competent authors, and Wanda is definitely one of them in my opinion. I missed her stories earlier because she submits in Incest/Taboo. I dislike incest, and not even Wanda could write one good enough to get me to read it if it was mother-son or father-daughter, but I can ignore cousins long enough to enjoy her writing.

Lue

Really enjoyed this story.

Thank you!

Looking forward to the next chapter, keep up the great writing and wonderful imagination.

One of the best stories I've read on this site. Excellent story that painted a wonderful picture of two people finding love. I applaud you. Please keep this story going!!

I loved this story. Can't believe Wanda uses onehitwanda as a user name. All of her stories are hits. She is a wonderful writer!

...BLOODY BRILLIANT!!!

I've never been to England, but you descriptive writing made me feel like I was there.

I absolutely love this story! I was captivated by the beautiful scenery and bustling life London would likely have. I've never been there, but I have met and spoken with a lot of English people. Charming to say the least. Hot and wild. And love. True true love! I especially appreciated the way the sex scene was written. All to often when reading from this site, you read very descriptive details about the look and size of the couples sexes. I love to use my own imagination with the characters bodies, builds, and sizes of ones manhood or womanhood. Perfect I would say! And very arousing! Thank you!

NOT really incest. It's legal to marry first cousins...

Absolutely loved reading this story.

It was totally amazing... I loved the story overall... It just seems that its lacking a short epilogue. I feel like its quite needed and well... Like I wanted to know if they'll be together and if Andrew would take permanent residence in the house they had. So many questions but still... A great read.

this so wonderfully describes the gestalt of being in London, so special. Great work

A truly lovely story! Wonderfully crafted and a delight to read! Well done!

One of the best stories I've read here. Very well written

I'm not sure how, nor could I begin to ask how, but you've perfectly balanced not only the personas of South African and British, but made me feel as if I were right at home. Coming from a native South African I could feel that Andy was exactly that, and Jo was British. You are phenomenal at character development and growth, and your in depth writing had me hooked.

Once more. Bravo!

Walking through London, reading your descriptions, seeing them in my mind. And one can tell you were there. Amazing.

I've now read four of your stories, each one better than the last. Your verbal picture painting sets the stage so perfectly for the sexual encounter that is the climax (pun intended) of each tale. And although I usually want you to get to the sex sooner, ultimately you are spot on when to have your protagonists finally come together (also pun intended) sexually. At this point I consider you The Sensei of Sensuality.

I read all of your stories and loved them. Their stories about peoples lives, not just a fuck fest. The only problem is that their to short. You don't tie everything up. You just leave them hanging. Like this story, what happens tomorrow, Or like both Megan and Jamie, and David and Em. They all have one night together and .... What??? Please longer stories. You have to finish them.

I was just in London and could see some of the sights as they were described. Wonderful story.

The buildup was slow, but not lacking for anything. In fact, it couldn't be any better.

And the crescendo couldn't have been any better.

Makes the reader want to wish these two a good life together.

5 Stars, and an instant Favorite.

Thank you for this wonderful story. Really well done, you have excellent narrative skills. I feel bad for having given five stars to other stories by other authors as this is clearly far superior to 99.99% of things written on this platform. Such talent, such a great ear for dialogue - this is just tremendous storytelling. Your details, your conversation, your humor is all spot on and professionally presented. Bravo! I will read more! Thank you for sharing!

Sweet buildup, character development, and sexual encounters, all wrapped up in years of yearning. Great read!

Have been reading stories from this side and not once have I bumped into one including my country South Africa, thank you!.