All Comments on 'Lonely Words'

What a tough chick, some interesting self defense moves there, Good job guys.

Good luck in the challenge.

Enjoyable and fun. Hustling your way through school...now that's a NY story.

Jaz is certainly quite assertive, and I like that. Fun stuff and good job. :)

Even for someone who knows very little about pool, this was a fun story. They will make a great team in and out of bed, and both of them deserved to get lucky.

Great story. I liked the mutual success of the partnership. And by the way, those are Meucci cues, not Mucci.

MichaelG

Nothing hotter than a woman who can shoot pool. Unless its one that plays pool and can fight!

Deserved the 5 I gave it for the story even with the poor editing:

"Jasmine sunk four o the break

Jordan knew from experience ow much

entered the pool hall. Se seemed to

from head to toe as a an might assess

Jasmine sunk four o the break

rolled the cue I his fingers,"

Sometimes it's jasmine other times it's Jasmine.

There are more and I expected better cus the writing is nicely done.

(Have to say I love seeing this challenge and I salute the driving force behind it.)

The writers of this story were Nomdeplume and RobertReams

...but so many typos, sometimes more than one in a paragraph.