All Comments on 'Long Distance Relationship Ch. 01'

Interesting start to the story but ...

1. Please use a spellchecker

2. Get your facts straight ... if Dawn had flown 12 hours, obviously it's an international flight. Therefore she would have already got her bags from Baggae Claim before going through Customs and Immigration and BEFORE meeting Mark.

3. The choice of where Dawn would sleep would surely have been decided by Mark during their Internet courtship. Or has Dawn only come for sex?

I look forward to Ch. 2.

Look forward to reading more.......