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All Comments on 'Lord of the Lifeguards Ch. 07'

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 3 years ago

Your story jumps way to much. You stated out with one main character and ended upwith multiple. Very confusing and hard to follow. Also your details keep getting mixed up. I would pull it and rewrite the story in a better order.

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