All Comments on 'Losing Control at the Lake Ch. 01'

by Scheherazade73

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AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
sooo sexy

I made myself cum to this story!! More! More! More!

Pretty please?

RecHikerRecHikerover 11 years ago
I loved it

Great story! Thanks for sharing. I gave you 5 stars for this wonderful story.

RecHiker

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago

More from this story please? :) I found it captivating!

Scheherazade73Scheherazade73over 11 years agoAuthor

Thanks for the generous feedback, everyone. I aim to please! It's my first time posting, so thanks for being gentle ;)

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago

This story has lots of potential for further chapters. Please keep on going.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago

love the intimate detail, one of the best stories I've ever read on here! Can't wait for more

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Thank you!

Love the approach. Looking forward to the next chapter!

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
great story.

great story. just on little thing, a person in their 'eighteenth summer" is only 17. i'm not sure how picky the censors on this site are. but, be warned

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
omg

loved it!!!

Scheherazade73Scheherazade73over 11 years agoAuthor
Chapter 2 is on its way...

Thanks for the feedback :)

CrankThzJackInDaBoxCrankThzJackInDaBoxover 11 years ago
bravo + encore:

i've didn't actually read entire story just yet. bits & pieces. here + there.

all that i've can say now to what i've read - bravo + encore & phenomenal....

part2 - somehow someway it becomes `the uncle + the niece & derek's mom`

{or} the niece + derek's mom get into romp somehow someway which will set up

the uncle getting in with them being part3

DarkWolfKnight7DarkWolfKnight7over 11 years ago
Loving this!

Such a well written and emotional sensual story, was so much fun to read and so hot as well. Please do continue with more of them!

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
amazing much

this was absolutly amazing. i love the way you write and im extreamily picky when it comes to things like that. Your great and im in love. you need to continue, and not just to chapter two... i need more :))))))))))))

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Beautiful

This has been my favorite set of stories.

I don't think that Jayme and Dana should add someone to their affair because I feel as if it would take away from their relationship, but i did enjoy that you added Dana having a relationship with Josh because it added conflict to the story and conflict is what makes it seen realistic. Please don't stop at chapter 2. Please keep it going for as long as you can. :) Bravo!

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
I love this

great start..you held my interest from the start and did not disappoint ..if there was a 10 then I would give yu a 10. sorry it can only be a 5

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
11252012

I like this story very much. I like the style of writing, plus how much he cares for her.

joodlejoodleover 11 years ago
Well written

Some of my favorite authors will write so vividly, but with obvious grammatical errors from time to time. This is understandable when conveying intense passion. With your writing though, you seem to edit pretty well. I appreciate that. Not to mention the thrilling and stimulating storyline. You have shaped the characters well, and made the circumstance believable. I am really looking forward to reading further. Very well done!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago

This is my favorite story sseries of all time. Pretty sure I've read it about 25 times.

OleguyOleguyalmost 11 years ago
Grammar 101 again.

Do wish some commentators would just lay back and enjoy the images that such a delightful story gives.

Gotta say that as an Australian, the image of a 'douchbag' is positively revolting.

If someone was to call me that they would get a size 10 boot in the ball bag.

There now I have gone off again.

Did like the story and your expertise in placing in front of me.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 8 years ago
amazingly intense!

Wow! Mind blowing hot!

PhineasNPhineasNalmost 7 years ago
So hot

I'm envisioning the perfect little 18 yo brunette and I can't help but wish I could've been in Jayme's position at some point in my life, having a neice like that crushing on me. Good work. Keep writing

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