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"Yes the Emperor has opened twelve to fourteen percent of most of the ships now. He said that it made us better in combat and I tend to agree." Shelby said.
"Yes, Commander Tara said something along the same thing. I will miss her greatly, I also am hoping the Emperor will give me a prime as capable as she was." Tara said hope sounding in her voice.
"I am sure he will though at the moment we are still trying to re-establish the Empire. The Emperor has just started that with these visits to the upper Nobles. I am just hoping that they don't continue to be as difficult as they have been." Shelby relayed to Tara.
"The Emperor should do as they all have done in the past mother. Just execute them and appoint new Nobles in their places. I mean that's how the first three Emperor's did it." Tara told her mother.
"Yes I know daughter but..." Shelby started.
"I am not as blood thirsty as that Tara I believe everyone deserves a chance, well almost everyone." Derrick told the two whispering Holograms.
"He executed the leader of the Republic that had replaced the Empire for crimes. Though he had to do it, he still found it distasteful." Shelby explained to Tara.
Tara's eyes were wide, this Emperor didn't like to kill? Maybe for the first time in the history of the Empire there wouldn't be endless blood shed for years on end.
"Now," Derrick started. "All of you are re-gened enough for me to tell all of you. I found all of you, having you re-gened will help the Empire. Before all of you though, 0098, Lucy was helping." There were several groans before Ace spoke up.
"Shut up! Listen to what the man has to say!" Ace yelled quieting the others.
As tears started to fall from his eyes Derrick described the bravery and unselfish act that Lucy did to save the galaxy. All the ships that didn't know the story were shocked into silence. "She is the next ship in the re-gen matrix when she emerges I want her to receive the heroes welcome that she more than deserves."
All the ships bowed to Derrick and promised that their sister would be more than welcomed. Derrick nodded finally Lucy would be back among them! Derrick had to turn his head as the tears were welling up so large.
- COMMENTS
Anonymous3 months agoI love this story but I feel like there’s a few things you may want to consider. Find an editor from this site to help you. A LOT of this chapter was just run on sentences or lacking punctuation to a point I had to reread it several times before I understood the point that was being made. Signal thoughts with something. Italian, an apostrophe ‘internal thoughts’ or an asterisk even.
I had to get you away from her and her babying he thought vs
‘I had to get you away from her and her babying’ he thought.
Also separate different speakers or speaking from internal thoughts with a new line.
“I can’t believe you did this” he said. “But you told me to”. Ugh this woman is driving me mad he thought
^no (not a quote from the story but example)
“I can’t believe you did this” he said.
“But you told me to”
Ugh this woman is driving me mad he thought.
^ yes
Also is there something I missed with Dempsey that is allowing his pupil to learn at warp speed? A guy becomes a master of an assassin art in 8 days? Oddly enough THAT seems to pull me out of the story more than a several mile long ship being built from essentially thin air in a week.
You dont need to cram a million quips and explanations into things either. Over explaining or delving insanely deep into something minor or going on and on about a persons hatred for another gets distracting
Anonymousalmost 7 years agoSome chapters begin with the list of Elite Imperial Guardians:
0001 - Tempro
0003 - Conner
Why not put the name of the Prime next to the name of the ship?
hellinahelmetalmost 7 years agoMan I read close to 25 chapters this weekend. Really got my head wrapped around this story, thank you for a great yarn, looking forward to the next chapters...
Anonymousalmost 7 years agohi when are you goign ot post the chapter up to 48. that posted on other sights ????
i kinda , want to sew how it ends.
godo sory.
