by ovids_lackey
I like the setting of this, and want to know more about what has happened to her. I hope that this will continue.
I really loved your story, the setting, the characters it just kept my attention wondering what next was going to happen to Mandy amd also the touch of humour.
As my title said what more could you want this story had everything in it, please can we have more!!!
Good. It needs more *description* though: it reads like a summary of what happened instead of an unfolding--I have no picture in my head of what thing the character is turning into, and no real memory of the sex. You have a good basic story: interesting plot, interesting characters. Flesh it out some next time.