All Comments on 'Love in Louisiana'

First submission? You're off to a good start. Look forward to reading more.

Tallie,

Your contribution was absolutely excellent, I enjoyed it immensely. LOL. Please continue writting, you have a very unique talent.

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Tallie:

Enjoyed tremendously the adventure of Johanna and daughter Mallorie. Pictured the scenario as if the pool were in my own back yard.

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Well done.

But seemed a little rushed after the bet. Not bad, tho.

It's good, but I have to agree that it felt kind of rushed after the bet. Don't be afraid to elaborate on details and give it realistic conversation. Remember, the idea of incest is taboo. It's a cool idea for a mom and daughter to go at eachother that quickly, but it would more than likely take a little more convincing.

In anycase, I enjoyed your story and would suggest it to anyone who enjoys this genre.

Very nice story!!!

Nothing like a good quickie. Short, but satisfying.