All Comments on 'Love Me Tender - Please Pt. 01'

Marriage in real trouble, with a lot of help. Wife needs to figure out what she wants cause she can't have both. right now she is not acting like a loving wife, or a wife at all. Looking foward to the rest. Good writing, thanks.

If you broke this up into 4 chapters, you'd have more readers. There are plenty of long stories with many chapters.

<p>I agree that smaller posts would get more readers. Are all of the 7 parts this long? The Literotica story navigation features break down after 12 pages, so 16 page chunks are hard.</p> <p>At this point in the story you have dug a pretty big hole for their continued marriage. I'm having a hard time imagining 6 more parts of 20 chapters each. But you made a good hook with the opening 2 years in the future. The major clue is that she has kept the weight off and has a tan in May. She is still in the money so her real-estate work must be doing OK. The fact that she the launches into a linear memory dump is suspect -- if they reconciled I would have expected that to be top of her memories (but that would kill the suspense). I hope the title gets explained; right now there is no tenderness. </p>

No content for this long of a story. This woman is a stupid bimbo and you have no understanding of life in general

1) shorter chapters, nobody has time to read some hours a day.

2)really very good writing

3)nice story

4)not erotic, please explain what is here erotic. a couple who has a loving marriage and two kids, so starts the story.(just to say it, all parents where I grew up had to work both because one salary was not enough). the woman wants to start working again, good, my mother always did. the woman starts to forget she has a husband and two kids. in this case I think what happens with the kids is even worse than how she treats the husband. so after 16 nicely written pages we have a woman who did not see her daughter for almost 2 weeks and knows her father is lonely most of the time, a son who sees the same things and is fleeing from home as much as his sister. both try to console their father in involving him more in their lives then thy did ever before and of course trying to get some warmth from at least one part of their parents. so far the woman did not sexually cheat on her husband, but she disrepects him in any other way and goes behind his back all the time.

so now the big question what should be the erotic point on that? where do you get your orgasm? is it because her husband feels like shit? is it because both kids feel like shit? is it because the kids get to know a lot of rumors about their mother being a hotty and nice to party with if dad is not around? you can't feel happy when there is no drama allmost every day?

for me erotic means a lot of things but not bullshitting the whole family and friends and treat them bad or not at all.

I have so many questions about this woman, that I don't where to start. I can't believe that she is faithful to her husband, she has all of the traits of subterfuge and conspiracy of hiding another life style. I can not believe that she is that nieve and sheltered that she thinks that everything that she has done is correct for a married woman.The honest and reputable thing she should do, is tell him that he doesn't cut it anymore and she is tired of the kids, then split to her new life.Stop dragging a good man down to her level, the gutter is where she belongs, not him

You write very well and this is a very involving story, one that engages our emotions. I find myself very troubled by it. But chapters as long as this one are hard on readers. I hope you'll consider shorter posts, even if it takes more of them to complete the story. I look forward to seeing where it goes from here. Thanks, ohio

The writing is very good and the story reads smoothly. The suspense is building very slowly. What I don't understand is why this obviously intelligent couple seems unable to consider the need for counseling. It's clear that there is still some love for each other but it's dying in the same way that a plant dies if it gets insufficient light or water. A marriage takes work, it requires maintenance, and this is not happening. Ray and Karen are not able to talk honestly with each other, they simply can't communicate their feelings. Karen's separate bank account, her sexy lingerie (that she does not wear for Ray), her lies, her secrecy regarding the Las Vegas trip, her indifference to her children -- all point to her distancing herself from her family (maybe to minimize her guilt feelings). I expect she'll cheat on Ray on that trip, if she hasn't already done so. Humping a young guy while learning the "Salsa" and doing open mouth kisses with Mike while hugging up close already seem like cheating, the only remaining part being a penis in a vagina kind of cheating. OK, she wants to feel young again, she likes the flattery and the attention, but for a woman who was so uptight and hung-up on what type of sex is proper, she sure is behaving improperly yet her guilt is really minimal even though she knows deep down that she is wrong. Maybe she is having a mid-life crisis or something. I must also blame Ray because he is really too supportive at this point. He should just put his foot down and say they are going to counseling or he is filing for divorce. But he keeps acting in a wishy-washy manner, he is indecisive even about going to the "party" and only decides at the last minute. It seems Mike and his wife are swingers or something; maybe they are trying to get Ray and Karen into their lifestyle. I trust the camera Ray was recently carrying will serve its purpose . . .

But blimey! Was this long I know you said at the start this would be a long story. But I do agree that chapters would have been better. Apart from that the story is well written and reads like a book. I have pity for both of them at this moment in time they are out of sync. The wife strangely seems to be out of sync with the family as well, which is unusual. Anyway looking forward to seeing where this goes.

Keep writing.

I hope that there is a finish to this epic story

12/19/08 by digdaddyrich in southwest Ohio USA <p>

I have so many questions about this woman, that I don't where to start. I can't believe that she is faithful to her husband, she has all of the traits of subterfuge and conspiracy of hiding another life style. I can not believe that she is that nieve and sheltered that she thinks that everything that she has done is correct for a married woman.The honest and reputable thing she should do, is tell him that he doesn't cut it anymore and she is tired of the kids, then split to her new life.Stop dragging a good man down to her level, the gutter is where she belongs, not him <p>

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How could someone drag you down, if you are strong, intelligent, no-nonsense, and decisive? He DOES belong "there" with her, wherever that place is. If he doesn't belong there, HE will have known and will have told her so, by now! <p>

This is not a 3-5 page story, where corners have been cut in the interest of time/space. Instead, it is a short novel-length story, so we have plenty of time to get to know, to understand, the husband and wife and their characters. <p>

He is a fuckin' wishy-washy pussy and she will do as she please, and he will simply bitch about it but won't want to do any thing. At least THAT's what the creator of the story says.

There are tons of short stories out there, I appreciate the effort you have put in it and I can find time to read a good story like yours. I am concerned, the wife is acting like a crazy bimbo and will certainly lose her husband and kids over the party or the trip to Vegas. Curious to see how you finish this. Does she come to her senses or does she lose it all. Thanks for the interesting and captivating story.

Drifter

you are making a mistake on the length --How many want to spend 1 1/2 hr reading ?--not me!

please!

and quite realistic, at least for me. I myself went through similar situation a few years ago even though in my case it didn’t go that far as we see in this story. Fortunately me and my wife were able to outgrow it and got together again. When I get back to these days now, I see everything gets down to figure out who are you, what do you want and what price you are willing to pay in order to achieve yor wish. As long as one has his/her priority list straighten up the whole problem disappears by itself.

Ref to their lack of communication: they used to live very conservative style of life so it seems to me they both don’t have much experience in the new dynamic surroundings. I have observed that quite often intelligent people with high education (Ray) fail in communications. I guess this is because they expect (wrongly) other people to be as good in analyzing and make logical conclusions as they are.

Ref length of story: I don’t have any issue with it (I love reading long stories). However I have some concerns having in mind it is a 7 part story. If it keeps describing in detail facts that we already know, it will become redundant and boring. I would like to see a turnover or two. Something like her business goes down, he gets a new, high-income job with a lot of travelling and social functions required. You see my drift – I would like to put them in their partner’s shoes and see how they will handle it.

A request to Kathy: Please, finish the story…...there are some many promising but unfinished stories out there.

yes ok but you are going to finish it i hope and soon

Good storyline and very descriptive writing. I agree that the subsequent parts need to be broken into smaller submissions. Please hurry the rest.

A wonderful submission by the author. Readers are very familiar with Karen and Ray because Kathi has taken the time to develop their character as well as the plot line. Karen's single minded journey to discover herself has led to considerable success in the business world at no slight cost to her family life. Ray apparently cannot string together two sentences without his fears and his anger causing another fight between he and Karen.<P>So far this story is a really thorough exposition of how disruptive a lack of communication and basic honesty can be to a marriage. If Karen simply had discussed why she wanted a job and the type of work she wanted to do she could have received Ray's concurrence and support without all the tragedy to follow.<P>Excellent work even if it is bit much to read in one sitting.

You could of broken the story up a lttle bit, ut why you had from the begining till the end. Please, please, please, I implore you to finish this story. You are at the pentical of the story, will she choose family or career....

for this couple is they subconsciously live in their “old times” i.e. before wife started her job. They judge and react by their old standards so no doubt they both feel guilty most of times as soon as they realize they have thrown the baby away with the water. I can see they both have feelings one to another however wife is dizzy from being in the spotlights and hubby is hurt for not being #1 any longer, so the result is they are going in different directions.

A few random observations:

1) I suspect they are being set up: A) Her boss (a known womanizer) starts hitting on her immediately after she joined the agency. He is always subtle, walking the thin line between being professional and intimate. Way too supportive, way too complimentary, way too big of a gentleman. However no matter what he does he never misses the chance to rub his presence on Ray’s face (borrows her his monogrammed shirt, throws out a party after she got caught kissing him, etc.). He knows how to play her strings – he offers her an agent position only 2 months after she started working for him, sends her to a real estate class, reimburses her tuition, gives her a 10K bonus (I wish I could find such an employer myself), becomes her financial advisor, and so on. So I am positive he feeds his bait to her. B) His wife Donna known for “lifting men with her pussy” starts meeting Ray at groceries, talks sexy to him, let him touch her breasts and most importantly plants some seeds of doubt in his mind (in addition to those that he has already have). I see Karen and Ray in very dangerous situation but sorry – I can’t help them from being naïve.

2) How come a receptionist with a base pay of $12.50 per hour and “Little presents of checks as a bonus for complicated sales” can afford to purchase a brand new Escalade just in 2 months (as far as I know the GM SUV starts at 60+K these days)? They should have a lot of complicated sales, eh?

3) How come the same receptionist (still not a licensed real state agent) can make more money just in 4 months after her initial hiring than a full time college professor with at least 15 or more years of experience and 2 PhD’s under his belt? I have never been a real estate or a professor but this seems a little odd. At least it must have taken place before the real state market hit the bottom:-) 4) For the whole length of this part neither of them has had any contact out of the immediate family and work (exception to Ray’s barber) - it must be the author’s idea, I guess. Don’t they have other family members, friends, relatives, etc – people who they can share their thoughts with and eventually get a piece of advice? No doubt they both have been acting extremely naïve and vulnerable.

Clarification: I’m not bitching just for the sake of it. I really liked to story. It is realistic. I feel for Karen and Ray. For comparison - a couple of days ago I read a story about a guy who found a dozen of coins with (a few millions worth) a few days after his wife left him for a richer man….this is some real fiction I won’t comment on.

I’m looking forward to seeing another chapter before X-mas

Happy Holidays Everyone!

The story is pretty long but it could have been trimmed down.

Are you planning to finish it or are you planning to leave it incomplete? Your reply is requested.

Would like you to complete it or throw it open for other Literotica writers to complete it

I've been drawn into this story by Kathi's evident narrative skill and by the urgency of the theme. Nevertheless, I find the work long almost to the point of tedium--at least in a few places. So far my only serious complaint is with the the Ray character. To be sure, his jealousy and perhaps his insecurity are the crucial elements in the on-going saga of this marriage. I feel that his is a one-dimensional depiction. He is a college professor, he goes to a job and comes home and has sex with his wife. Is that all? He is an intellect dealing with university students and bowling is his principal preoccupation? I think that Karen's entanglements would be starker if displayed against a more developed Ray.

Its waaaaaaaay tooo fucking long and the characters are too over developed.

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when we read about husbands and wives.. men and woman.. in THIS much detail the READER expects certain questions /ideas to be at least discussed.

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Its Not a matter what what the READER wants the author to do.

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But folks this intelligent in a story this Long should be able to say at least one time.. or THINK... at least one time...

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hey we have a marruage problem.

I hope that you finish this story off. Please do not leave your readers hanging...

Whoa! I had to stop, a lot, and watch something happy on the Hallmark channel. Over and over this story makes my heart hammer and it hits oh so close to home, that is, a home lost in history now. I can't stop reading and it's making me miserable. Go figure...

This is almost like a Peter Sellers comedy turned into a tragedy. The examples of fear to be open, poor communication and lost opportunity are all too real.

Man, do I dislike Karen. I can't figure why she is so self-centered and selfish after 20 years of marriage. I cringed at her husband's first gaffe with a display of insecurity, but after a while I realized he was thinking in terms of what he knew about Karen over those years and a deep love. His instinct is yelling at him but can't overcome the learned knowledge of a long marriage.

I sure hope I can handle the rest of this story!

If you ever get a movie made on this story, send me a ticket ! This is very realistic and I'm hooked. I hope something good happens at the end of this story.

If it weren't for Literotica I'd probably never come across the term, "wasn'thing". Hard to find it using Google. Sure didn't come from U.S. English. I like the story but am somewhat upset with the back and forth thinking of wifey. Guess it will be resolved in later parts.

I love these longer stories. You have a great one going here. The sex is fun as well as well placed among the character building paragraphs.

I look forward to reading the rest of what you have posted.

The husband isn't very sympathetic. What a wimp!

why does the Cruel put his fangs in the midst, TK U MLJ LV NV

this is a high quality price of writing that was in my bookmarks list for years. The length of it scared me away. So glad I decided to jump in now that I am on Christmas break and feel like I have exhausted every good story on Literotica. This is one of the best. An instant favorite. Five stars.

been reading some of the other comments. At this I would say that they are both the blame for the state of their marriage. I don't get the comment about her disrespecting him. It is quite normal for a wife to transition back into a career once the children reach a certain age. He should be more supportive. I can only guess that it is the jealousy that is getting in the way. They seemed to have a good marriage prior to her going back to work. I also keep wanting to screen at him to fight for her. As the daughter said, give her complements, show her how special she is to you, etc. while her behavior has been inappropriate, she hasn't crossed the point of no return. If he would just step up his game, she probably wouldn't. However, at this rate she will be starting an affair shortly. I want to blame her for her actions, but I am sympathetic. You have written this in such an authentic manner that I can see the slow slide and it makes perfect sense. Yes, she is fantasizing about another guy, but who hasn't? Yes, she is enjoying the attention these other men are giving her, but what girl wouldn't? Again, his actions are pushing her away slowly. She is resisting, but he has to put the full court press on. I can hear some people complain that a husband shouldn't have to fight for his wife's affection. Really? These people don't seem to know much about marriage.

she has placed herself in a very toxic environment and doesn't seem to realize where she is headed. The husband does make a small effort to find her and give her flowers. He catches her kissing another guy and she justifies it. Very stupid. That is disrespectful. I get it. If I were assigning blame, she edges out hubby, but only slightly. He needs to man up and pursue her harder. Would it make a difference? Maybe not. She is being seduced on several fronts. She is trying to resist. However, hubby is not giving her any reason to try harder.

Brilliant stuff. Some of the best writing on this site.

    My tendency is to start reading a new story in the middle to see if is any good. I figure if the middle isn't any good why waste time reading the setup. So I read some of part four and it was better than good! So I went back and read part one and I liked it a lot. Liked the tension slowly building like a teapot getting ready to boil. Just like Ray we can see this marriage slowly disentegrating. The falling balloon comparison was super.

     I'd like to say the biggest culprit was their lack of communication but it seems like there's bigger problems here than just that. Ray has taken his wife for granted, you get the feeling it wasn't the first birthday he'd forgotten but to say Ray hasn't been supportive of Karen is mostly all in her head. I mean heck, he's doing the laundry, doing the shopping, running after the kids, what the heck more does she want? There's probably 100 million working women in the U. S. alone that would love that much support.

      And its true he seems to have a hard time completementing her but she really hasn't given him much opportunity to do so. It's hard to complement a spouse who's kissing other people, says she's working late but is out partying instead, plans a trip to Vegas and doesn't even think to ask her husband if he'd like to go too, and is sleeping in the guest room, with the door locked. When you throw in her starting her own credit and checking and putting the car in her name only you can really only come to one conclusion. She's not just starting a new career now that the kids are grown, she's starting a whole new life, and Ray doesn't seem to figure in it. Did I mention spending the day at Mike's house partying after telling Ray she had to work all day? These things would be fine, some of them anyways, if she wasn't doing them behind Ray's back. But there's no excuse for lying about them and shutting Ray out of her life unless she no longer wants him in it.

     Ray sees all this but he doesn't have a clue what to do about it. If I was his friend I'd tell him she's making plans for a life without you and you'd better plan for a life without your wife in it. Open your eyes and be ready.

    Sure there were some idiosyncracies, like a temporary secretary saying she put the car in her name only for business reasons, surely she didn't think Ray would buy that did she? Or is there really a female alive that doesn't know that if there boss kisses you in his office with the door closed he's not just being supportive?  Or her self denial about weather she was doing anything wrong? Why make Karen such a ditz? But these things didn't get in the way of my enjoying the story.

She is heading for a divorce if she doesn't get her head out of her cunt.

Excellent,once again.BTW I'm really getting tired of typing this one word ,every time I read your story,you know ? lol.

Karen- is she evolving or devolving ? As for Ray , true love never makes one weak.

A "long" trail of 5 stars.

It reads like a well played labor of love.

Thanks for sharing.

I usually favor reconciliation type stories where you feel the pain as both spouses work to rebuild. However, at this point I'm going to have a tough time with the wife as she really seems to have dumped her family.

Not too long for me. I wish there were more like this.

But dang you sure can tell a tale!!

Ray is a bit too much of a doormat. And his wife seems unable to be honest. Very unlikeable pair of characters, but I keep reading, so well done!

And absolutely brilliant step-by-step will evolve description and assessment of how a nerve is disintegrated. It's the story of a woman's evolution from being totally dependent to being narcissistically no sophistically independent appointment or nobody and nothing matters except her once and needs. Truly the only thing that's important to her is fulfilling or narcissistic was for sex money power independence and nothing else virtually nothing else matters to her , Increasingly not even her children.

She's livin She's living in the self delusional worlds of lies and deceits that She play She She blifely justifies as a reason to support her own independence because her husband won't. Concurrently her husband is not being forced into personal evolution personal evolution and growth independent of his wife and particularly for so because his family is really disintegrating the kids going one way his wife ran another and he being left in the middle alone. I believe you'll have to come to the realization and laugh to grow and prove himself become independent in his own mind and really leave his marriage behind especially his wife although he will never lose his life for his children. In reality his marriage in the world I used to have is a long debt hes just having a hard time coming to accept it. His children really love him and always will but they've also come to realize that their mother is gone and they had separated themselves from her almost totally. At the time she realizes what she's done when it's caused her it's something going to be too late. She'll be a 40 plus woman trying to be a 20 or 30 something hot gi think hot girl and when her estrogen levels start to drop off and she begins to really aid she realizes she's left with nothing but vacuous memories of materialism and personal greed that have left her behind and she's sitting on the side of the river Of life just as she had left her husband. A good thing for a husband if he allows it to happen is that his relative youth will continue and if he takes care of himself gets his body in good shape and evolves as a person he will come out of this the stronger and one ahead with a better life.

His challenge is becoming self aware enough to realize that that Avenue awaits him and he simply has to leave the baggage of his dead marriage and his wife behind so that he can achieve it. In short he has to come to believe in his own potential and worth and ability to grow become better than me who was just as ex wife had. At this point in the story she really doesn't love her husband anymore and her entire world revolves around getting into the fun of things the rampant sex she knows she's going to have and the money she's going to make it all the power and it pends that comes with that. She's already separated her finances from her husband and when it comes home as As a base of operations and even that will disappear when she starts taking lover some doesn't come home at all. This is sad tragedy and evolution and has been brilliantly weighed up by the author.

Just as sh Just as she left her

This is one hellaciously long cuck story.

My third or fourth read…. Been a while and sure didnt recall everything