All Comments on 'Loving Jim Grand Ch. 01'

Well, Eddie, it is a good start...and hey! you can spell and do grammar, man. ;)

I sincerely hope your readers don't lose interest because of a lack of sex in part one - after all, sex is what this site is all about. Don't give up!

I loved how you built this story up. Stories that have a plot and aren't just wham bam thank you mam are always the best and most rewarding in my book. Thanks for putting this one out there

As another has said a good start but it reads as if it was written in other than english first and translated. I could be completely wrong but that's how it read to me.

Keep going , a good read so far.

good but too short.. you do need to watch a few grammar issues.

A good start but very short, needs to be longer chapters.

I loved the slow burn, the love pouring out of each sentence, the palpable drama, and most of all how sex didn't screw the whole story over. If the upcoming chapters are anything like this one they you're on your way to stardom here!

5* and nothing less!

incredible desires

Does Jiji have the amazing ass of bubble noted?

my opinion has should bone the two sisters like any following day, each one to you their turn and why not both at the same time? an idea interesting for the majority of the types! also do not forget to pulverize important cum on the large located one

Highly chapter 2, tank you bye

Nice chapter 1 but ffs why no more, why bother if your not gonna carry it on... it wastes everyones time n im pissed off with you writters keaving half a story unfinished.

If you cant finish it dont start it !.,!

It's been a long time since you wrote ch. 1. I enjoyed the build up, the people in the story, but you have left me hanging.

Please please please finish this story, I need to know what happens with his Jim and sisters.

Solid first chapter, but nothing since. Another unfinished ‘what-if’ story it seems