All Comments on 'Loving Silver Eyes Ch. 01'

im sorry to say, but this is like reading twilight. Nothing i haven't read before, but other than that it was well written.

Don't worry, this isn't like twilight. Please do follow and you'll see for yourself!!

I love stories outside the box!! Don't pay any attention to the Twilight stuff. To put your thoughts on paper for all to read takes courage. Please, just keep going...

Hey, I'm liking this so far-first time out and I'm impressed!

Keep it coming!

Abbotsford hmmm?

New Westminster, BC being represented here ;)

Go Girl!

For your first story, this is a great start. I have read a couple of storys that opened up at a school, but that was the only thing the storys had in common. Each one was completely different from the other, and each was enjoyable to read. So keep writing your story the way you want, after all it's your story. I appreciate the fact that you are sharing your story. Again I think it is a great start and will eagerly be awaiting the next chapter. Good luck and happy writing.

Good plot development and building of anticipation..... looking forward to seeing more.

I really enjoyed the prologue. I hope we'll find out who was tracking and killed her mom. The story is a bit twilight-esque so far but her problems with the sun make me think it will be different as you develop the story. I also hope we get a hint of whether the people watching them in the pizza place are for or against them. I'm looking forward to seeing where it goes.

Stephenie Meyer should be pleased with the compliment. You have knocked off her characters with only the slightest of a twist. I understand that you probably hold her saga in high regard, but maybe you should focus that around a fan fiction format, and venture out into your own world (of imagination) for something that carries your implied ownership (even if it is only for literotica). I can't really tell if your story structure would stand on its own without the Twilight repetitions, because they are too much of what you have written. Hopefully having walked out into this story with S.M.'s framework to hold it up, you will find a way to venture out on your own.

For your first story this is good. I'm eager to know who i watching them in the Pizza Place. Who killed her mom and what makes her special.

Please write another chapter soon.

I don't know why people keep saying it;s like twilight but I dont see the resemblance. I really really enjoyed reading it and I hope you ignore the negative comments and continue to write.

Very twilightesque .. thanks for writing :)

It does seem alot like twilight, hoping this turns out better. :) * not a huge twilight fan although I read all the books*

I was really captured by the starting scene, but after reading on I couldn't help but recognize the resemblence to Twilight. You have really good writing skills but I think you need to work on a more original plot. Honestley I couldn't keep reading and am trying to find it within me to continue on... You have obvious talent I don't think its's necessary to copy another story. Good luck!!

It seems too much like Twilight

yes, it may seem a bit twilight-ish here because like I said, I couldn't get Twilight off my head when I started writing... but again, I assure you, you will see that it is nothing like twilight after you read the next chapters...

:)

Marie

It dosenot matter that it is a little twilightish it is a very good story so far.