All Comments on 'Lucifer Rising'

I enjoyed the plot immensely. The idea was solid.

The story was not very well developed and lacked detail and overall cohesiveness.

I think you should have expanded and put in a whole lot more details.

Hopefully you take this as it's intended, as constructive criticism.

Like the previous comment you could have wrote this as a whole story series and it would be really cool if you did and then make a sequel to this hopefully but please dont let it be a stand alone one chapter story its to good for just that

well you started out good but you lost it , sorry no gold ring .better luck next time